Question

請根據(jù)以下提示，并結(jié)合具體事例，用英語寫一篇短文。

Small things make a big difference. The small things we do can make us a responsible member of the society

注意：

1.無須寫標(biāo)題；

2.內(nèi)容必須結(jié)合你生活中的具體事例；

3.文中不得透露個人姓名和學(xué)校名稱；

4.詞數(shù)不少于120，如引用提示語則不計入總詞數(shù)。

Answer 1

It isn’t hard to grow up into a responsible member of society.

I can well remember an incident that happened on a rainy Sunday afternoon. I was on my way to the bookstore and was waiting for the green light at a crossing when a girl of about ten was knocked down by a passing car, which drove off quickly. A man immediately rushed to the girl to give her first aid and I joined in without hesitation. Luckily she was not badly injured and we sent her to the nearest hospital. Compared with the escaped driver, I am proud of what I did.

As a member of the society, I am aware that being responsible is what it takes to make a better society.

【解析】

試題分析：考官評卷首先會根據(jù)文章的內(nèi)容和語言判定作文所屬的檔次，然后從：內(nèi)容切題，語言表達(dá)準(zhǔn)確、多樣、連貫、得體，這幾個方面評定分?jǐn)?shù)。 結(jié)合具體的事例的作文要注意，文中不能出現(xiàn)真實的姓名和場景，描述客觀發(fā)生過的事情多用被動的方式表達(dá)。注意條理要清晰，邏輯順序和結(jié)構(gòu)要恰當(dāng)。要注意題中所給的信息，不可偏題，可以多進(jìn)行一些補充，盡量保持卷面整潔，字體美觀，注意行文的連貫性。時態(tài)：一般過去式。結(jié)構(gòu)上：可采取總分模式。使用一些高級句型和詞匯提升作文檔次。

【亮點說明】joined in、 knocked down、without hesitation、 drove off 、Compared with 、am proud of 等短語使文章更生動； It isn’t hard to grow up……..It做形式主語提前 �！� an incident that happened on a rainy Sunday afternoon.中that引導(dǎo)的定語從句an incident 作為that的先行詞，that后面的部分是對incident的描述。I was on my way … at a crossing when a girl of about ten was knocked down by a passing car, which drove off quickly. 其中有when引導(dǎo)的時間狀語從句以及后面的which引導(dǎo)的非限制性定語從句。一個復(fù)合句中使用多個不同的小句，能顯示出作者的文字功底。a girl of about ten was knocked down、 she was not badly injured 描述過去發(fā)生過的事情采用被動形式表示出客觀描述的事實，顯得文章自然真實。Compared with the escaped driver, I am proud of what I did.中Compared with是過去分詞短語做狀語提前，意思上相當(dāng)于一個條件狀語從句； I am proud of what I did.中有what引導(dǎo)的賓語從句。文章的安排分為三部分，開頭部分：開門見山地引出文章主題。正文部分：描述具體事件。結(jié)尾部分：呼應(yīng)主題，首尾相應(yīng)。

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