Question

【題目】假設你是李華，你的好朋友Susan前不久隨父母去了美國，她寫信告訴你她很不適應美國的校園生活，感到很孤獨。請你根據(jù)以下要點用英語給她寫一封電子郵件。

1.學好英語，從而增加和別人交流的機會；

2.多交一些朋友，友情會使她忘記孤獨；

3.積極參加各種活動，使自己的生活更加有趣。

注意：1.詞數(shù)：100詞左右；2.可適當增加細節(jié)。（適應：adapt to)

Dear Susan,

I’m sorry to hear that you are having trouble

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Yours,

Li Hua

Answer 1

【答案】Dear Susan,

I’m sorry to hear that you are having trouble adapting to your new school life in America, but this situation can be easily changed if you take my suggestions. Now my suggestions are as follows:

Firstly, you should work hard at English, which can give you more opportunities to communicate with others. Secondly, why not make some friends? They can help you to know more about America, and friendship can help you to forget your loneliness. Thirdly, it would be a good idea if you take an active part in all kinds of activities, which will help to make life more interesting. I believe by doing this, you will be happier with your new life soon.

I hope these suggestions can be very useful to you.

Yours,

Li Hua

【解析】本文屬于提綱類作文，要求用英語寫一封電子郵件。要注意電子郵件的格式和特殊用詞。考慮用一般現(xiàn)在時來寫。要點：1.學好英語，從而增加和別人交流的機會；2.多交一些朋友，友情會使她忘記孤獨；3.積極參加各種活動，使自己的生活更加有趣。這篇文章對于考生的綜合能力要求較高，要求考生有很強的謀篇布局的能力和組織要點的能力。需要注意緊扣文章主題，給出的要點都需要包括，缺一不可。寫作時注意準確運用時態(tài)，上下文意思連貫，符合邏輯關系，一定要契合給出的開頭，不能出現(xiàn)文章脫節(jié)問題。盡量使用自己熟悉的單詞句式，同時也要注意使用高級詞匯和高級句型使文章顯得更有檔次。

【亮點說明】本篇書面表達要點全面，結構緊湊，是一篇較好的范文。這篇短文使用了大量的短語，為文章增色不少，如: take one’s suggestions采納某人的建議，take an active part in積極參加。還使用了定語從句Firstly, you should work hard at English, which can give you more opportunities to communicate with others.和定語從句Thirdly, it would be a good idea if you take an active part in all kinds of activities, which will help to make life more interesting.等多種句式結構，增加了文章的可讀性。