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10．假設(shè)你是舒城中學(xué)的學(xué)生張華，你給當(dāng)?shù)氐沫h(huán)保局寫一份報(bào)告，報(bào)告你們家鄉(xiāng)萬佛湖的現(xiàn)狀，內(nèi)容應(yīng)包括以下要點(diǎn)：
1．萬佛湖是舒城的旅游景地，歷來水清魚多；
2．現(xiàn)在由于工農(nóng)業(yè)污染和當(dāng)?shù)貪O民過度捕撈，湖水受污染，魚類和數(shù)量明顯減少；
3．你的建議．
To：The Bureau of Environmental Protection
From：Zhanghua
Date：27^th April
Subject：The situation of Wanfo Lake
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Answer 1

分析 本篇書面表達(dá)屬于提綱類作文，根據(jù)提示信息給當(dāng)?shù)氐沫h(huán)保局寫一份報(bào)告，報(bào)告你們家鄉(xiāng)萬佛湖的現(xiàn)狀，寫作時(shí)注意以下幾點(diǎn)：1、仔細(xì)閱讀有關(guān)提示，弄清試題提供的所有信息，明確幾個(gè)要點(diǎn)：萬佛湖是舒城的旅游景地，歷來水清魚多；現(xiàn)在由于工農(nóng)業(yè)污染和當(dāng)?shù)貪O民過度捕撈，湖水受污染，魚類和數(shù)量明顯減少；你的建議． 2、提綱是文章的總體框架，要在提綱的范圍內(nèi)進(jìn)行分析、構(gòu)思和想象．要依據(jù)提示情景或詞語，按照一定邏輯關(guān)系來寫．本文寫作時(shí)可以按照要點(diǎn)所給的順序?qū)懀?、根據(jù)要表達(dá)的內(nèi)容確定句子的時(shí)態(tài)、語態(tài)；就本文而言應(yīng)該用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)態(tài)．4．注意使用高級詞匯和句式，以增加文章的亮點(diǎn)．
【亮點(diǎn)說明】本文結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊，層次分明，而且使用了多種表達(dá)：Wanfo Lake，whose water was very clear，used to be a place of interest and there were various fish in it．句中使用了whose引導(dǎo)發(fā)非限制性定語從句；Therefore，the fish in it are becoming fewer and fewer because of the chemical waste and overfishing by the fishermen．句中的therefore，因此，屬于過渡詞，because of 屬于介詞短語；In conclusion總之．

解答 To：The Bureau of Environmental Protection
From：Zhanghua
Date：27^th April
Subject：The situation of Wanfo Lake
     Wanfo Lake，whose water was very clear，used to be a place of interest and there were various fish in it．（高分句型一）But now the water has been polluted and most of the pollution comes from industrial and agricultural waste．Therefore the fish in it are becoming fewer and fewer because of the chemical waste and overfishing by the fishermen．（高分句型二）
    In conclusion，a certain department needs to do something to handle the problem，or the fish in it will altogether disappear．It should prevent the pollution and educate the fishermen to strengthen the awareness of environment protection．（高分句型三）

點(diǎn)評 英語寫作是一項(xiàng)主觀性較強(qiáng)的測試題．它不僅考查學(xué)生的寫作基礎(chǔ)而且還考查學(xué)生在寫作過程中綜合運(yùn)用語言的能力．在撰寫時(shí)要注意主謂語一致，時(shí)態(tài)呼應(yīng)，用詞貼切等．要提高英語寫作水平，需要兩方面的訓(xùn)練：一是語言基礎(chǔ)方面的訓(xùn)練，要有扎實(shí)的造句、翻譯等基本功，即用詞法、句法等知識造出正確無誤的句子；二是寫作知識和能力 方面的訓(xùn)練以掌握寫作方面的基本方法和技巧．