Question

【題目】假如你是高二學(xué)生李華，下面這幅圖是你在網(wǎng)上看到的圖片。圖片內(nèi)容是兩位志愿者維護(hù)交通秩序的畫面。你有所感觸，打算針對(duì)此事給《二十一世紀(jì)英文報(bào)》編輯投稿。

要點(diǎn)如下：

1. 描述圖片內(nèi)容；

2. 你的感想。

注意：1. 同數(shù)：100左右，開(kāi)頭和結(jié)尾已為你寫好，不計(jì)人總詞數(shù);

2. 適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，以使行文連貫。

3. 參考同匯：交通禮儀traffic etiquette。

Dear Editor,

This is a picture of a busy road.

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Yours sincerely,

Li Hua

Answer 1

【答案】Dear Editor,

This is a picture of a busy road. The cyclists and the vehicles are waiting for the traffic lights to turn green. From the picture we can see each of the two women volunteers is holding a red flag to make a stop sign.

At some crossings of busy streets and roads in a city or a big town, we often see volunteers helping keep traffic order and maintain traffic safety. In addition, they also promote traffic etiquette. Due to their devotion, people’s awareness of traffic safety and obeying traffic laws can be improved. Their good deeds should be sung high praise for.

From my point of view, as civilized citizens we should obey traffic rules consciously and become polite drivers or cyclists. Thus we can help improve traffic conditions and reduce traffic accidents to some degree.

Yours sincerely,

Li Hua

【解析】本文屬于圖畫作文。圖畫作文的寫作要領(lǐng)：1、根據(jù)提示，準(zhǔn)確審題。要注意文體，人物和時(shí)態(tài)。2、認(rèn)真讀圖，把握情境，進(jìn)行圖文轉(zhuǎn)換。這是關(guān)鍵。要根據(jù)圖畫中的人物及背景，確定人物之間，人物與背景之間的關(guān)系。從整體上把握所呈現(xiàn)的主要內(nèi)容，圍繞特定的主題合理想象。然后將圖畫所傳達(dá)的信息以文字的形式呈現(xiàn)出來(lái)，并對(duì)轉(zhuǎn)換后的內(nèi)容重新組合，確定主要內(nèi)容。 3、發(fā)表感想。圍繞主題展開(kāi)合理的想象，發(fā)表自己的聯(lián)想或感想。4、確定段落，擬好提綱，斟酌詞句，組句成文。

亮點(diǎn)分析：本文結(jié)構(gòu)完整，內(nèi)容齊全。所用句子多為單句，結(jié)構(gòu)簡(jiǎn)單。在文中運(yùn)用了大量的現(xiàn)在進(jìn)行時(shí)，使描述更加生動(dòng)。文中主動(dòng)語(yǔ)態(tài)和被動(dòng)語(yǔ)態(tài)交互使用，使文章生動(dòng)活潑。同時(shí)還運(yùn)用了賓語(yǔ)從句：From the picture we can see each of the two women volunteers is holding a red flag to make a stop sign和非謂語(yǔ)做主語(yǔ)：obeying traffic laws can be improved。在文章中大量使用短語(yǔ)，如keep traffic order and maintain traffic safety， promote traffic etiquette，due to their devotion，sing high praise for，improve traffic conditions and reduce traffic accidents， to some degree等增加了文章的可讀性。而連詞的使用，如In addition, thus讓文章語(yǔ)句連貫，有條理。