Question

【題目】假定你是李華，你校外籍教師Miss Rose常常在課余時間輔導(dǎo)你英語口語，使你在上周學(xué)校舉行的英語演講比賽中榮獲第一名。為此，你決定寫一封感謝信，對Miss Rose的幫助表示真誠的感謝。

注意：1.文章包括上述內(nèi)容，可適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，以使行文連貫；

2.詞數(shù)100左右；

3．信的開頭和結(jié)尾已為你寫好，但不計入總詞數(shù)。

Dear Miss Rose,

I am writing to you

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I’m looking forward to hearing from you.

Yours sincerely,

Li Hua

Answer 1

【答案】Dear Miss Rose,

I am writing to you to tell you a piece of good news. Last week our school held a Spoken English Competition. I stood out in the competition and won the first place. In my view, all the achievement that I have gained is owed to your help. During your spare time, you often spent so much time in helping me with my spoken English that I made rapid progress. During the competition, I followed your advice on how to behave and how to keep a good state, which led to my success. I’m grateful for your help. Without your help, I couldn’t have won such a prize. I decide that I will make more efforts and try to make grater progress.

I’m looking forward to hearing from you.

Yours sincerely,

Li Hua

【解析】試題分析：試題為應(yīng)用文中的書信寫作，試題只給出寫作框架，并未給出所有的具體寫作細(xì)節(jié)，為半開放性寫作。寫好此文，需注意三點(diǎn)：一是寫信格式要準(zhǔn)確，信的開頭已經(jīng)給出，但切要寫好信的結(jié)尾。二是要詳略得當(dāng)，本文應(yīng)重點(diǎn)寫的是對Miss Rose的幫助表示真誠的感謝。三要注意適當(dāng)?shù)卦黾蛹?xì)節(jié)，恰當(dāng)?shù)厥褂眠B接過渡詞，以使行文連貫。另外，在寫作時要注意時態(tài)、語態(tài)的合理運(yùn)用。

【亮點(diǎn)說明】

本文是一篇感謝信，格式正確，內(nèi)容齊全，結(jié)構(gòu)布局合理，同時句中使用高級句子。In my view, all the achievement that I have gained is owed to your help.定語從句用在句中；you often spent so much time in helping me with my spoken English that I made rapid progress.so---that引導(dǎo)結(jié)果狀語從句；I followed your advice on how to behave and how to keep a good state, which led to my success.疑問詞加動詞不定式做介詞的賓語，并在句中使用which引導(dǎo)的非限制性定語從句；I decide that I will make more efforts and try to make grater progress.賓語從句和比較級完美結(jié)合；另外，In my view, During your spare time, made rapid progress.，During the competition,

Without your help等的運(yùn)用為文章增色添彩。