Question

假如你是李明，你跟你的e-pal  Paul聊天，他表示學習壓力很大，請你給他發(fā)封電子郵件，安慰他并給他提一些建議。  
【寫作內(nèi)容】
將自己的問題告訴老師和同學，請求得到他們的幫助。
不要總想著考試成績，要多想想自己在哪些方面進步了，這樣會更自信。
多做運動，運動可以幫助自己緩解壓力，并且有助于睡眠。
你對他的祝福。
【寫作要求】
用120個字左右表達全部的內(nèi)容，并組成一篇連貫的短文。（信的開頭和結(jié)尾已給出，不計入字數(shù)。）寫作中可能使用的詞匯: 緩解壓力 relieve stress.
Dear Paul,
I quite understand the great trouble you are suffering from.
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Yours sincerely,
Li Ming

Answer 1

Dear Paul,
I quite sympathize with you and understand the great trouble you are suffering from. I suggest you communicate your trouble to your teachers and classmates so as to get help from them. You are not supposed to think about your exams all the time, which only makes you more stressed out. Instead, you should think about the progress you have made in your study, which will surely increase your own confidence. In addition, I advise you to do more exercise in your spare time to relieve your stress, because sports will also help you sleep better at night.
I hope you will get out of your trouble sooner and live happily.
Yours sincerely,
Li Ming

試題分析： 本文屬于提綱類短文，用來安慰別人并提出一些建議，使用一般現(xiàn)在時。文章的要點都已經(jīng)給了出來：1.將自己的問題告訴老師和同學，請求得到他們的幫助。2.不要總想著考試成績，要多想想自己在哪些方面進步了，這樣會更自信。3.多做運動，運動可以幫助自己緩解壓力，并且有助于睡眠。4.你對他的祝福。要準確表達.寫作時注意準確運用時態(tài)，上下文意思連貫，符合邏輯關系，盡量使用自己熟悉的單詞句式，同時也要注意使用高級詞匯和高級句型使文章顯得更有檔次。特別注意在選擇句式時要賦予變化。
【亮點說明】本句中使用了較為高級的詞匯sympathize，communicate；還有較多的高級句式，如Instead, you should think about the progress you have made in your study, which will surely increase your own confidence.中的which指代前面的一句話的內(nèi)容，在句中做主語。還有原因狀語從句because sports will also help you sleep better at night.