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象山某高中舉辦了一次“看電影”的活動(dòng)。其中，高三（1）班的李華同學(xué)對(duì)電影《Tiny Times》里的一句話：“We are still efforts in the depths of despair（絕望）, and this effort be little stars in universe（宇宙）”十分有感覺。請(qǐng)仔細(xì)體味這句話，并結(jié)合自己的具體事例，根據(jù)下列要求寫一篇100—120詞的讀后感。
寫作要求：1、針對(duì)摘錄句來談?wù)勀愕睦斫狻?br />2、以李華的身份，簡述自己的親身經(jīng)歷。（要符合這句話的意思）
注意：文章開頭已給出，不計(jì)入詞數(shù)總數(shù)
Last week, our school held a movie activity. The movie ，named Tiny Times， made me impressed, especially a word in the movie let me unforgettable：“We are still efforts in the depths of despair, and this effort be little stars in universe.”
                                                                               
                                                                               
                                                                               

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One possible version:
In my opinion, we should try our best to realize our goals even though there is little hope .The efforts seem to be the lights in the darkness, leading the way to hope and success.
I used to be a shy girl in my primary school. I was weak in English at that time, especially for spoken English. So I was afraid to answer the teacher’s questions during English classes. After I entered my dream middle school, something changed. I started to read many interesting English stories and my English teacher was patient to help me a lot. I studied hard in class and practiced by watching English films and listening to English songs in my free time. Little by little, I found it more and more interesting to learn English. I could even talk with my classmates fluently in English and I was not shy any more. At last, I got high grades in English and I had confidence to do it better in the future.

試題分析：本文是篇材料作文，材料很簡單，學(xué)生很容易把握寫作要求和寫作目的。在寫作之前學(xué)生必須考慮以下問題，首先要注意文章的時(shí)態(tài)，要求是針對(duì)電影《Tiny Times》里的一句話談?wù)勛约旱母惺�，所以要用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)。要求針對(duì)這個(gè)話題寫一件個(gè)人經(jīng)歷的事。因此本文必須用第一人稱。還有一般過去時(shí)。再有就是應(yīng)該注意句子的銜接，以提高作文的檔次。
【亮點(diǎn)說明】文中使用了非常好的短語和句子為文章增色不少，比如In my opinion，used to，Little by little,at last，還運(yùn)用了復(fù)合句和it做賓語的用法等等。并注意了句子的銜接如：So he 句式的變化等等。