Question

【題目】假如你是李華，即將參加全國(guó)英語(yǔ)演講比賽。請(qǐng)給外教Peter發(fā)封電子郵件，詢(xún)問(wèn)是否可以將演講稿發(fā)給他，請(qǐng)他修改（revise），并說(shuō)明演講比賽的主題及舉行時(shí)間。

注意：1. 詞數(shù)100左右；

2. 可以適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，以使行文連貫。

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Answer 1

【答案】Dear Peter,

How are things with you? I’m writing to ask if I can email you my speech written for the annual National English Speech Contest, bearing the title “ Your Future Depends Mostly on You.”

The contest, which will be held on May 25, enables me to improve my English and other skills. I cherish this opportunity and worked tirelessly to rewrite the speech several times. But it is still far from satisfactory to me; it does not seem sufficiently expressive as expected because of my limited knowledge of the English language. I wonder if you can revise the speech and email your revised version to me before May 23. Many thanks!

I’m looking forward to your reply. Best wishes!

Yours,

Li Hua

【解析】

本篇書(shū)面表達(dá)屬于應(yīng)用文。要求考生寫(xiě)一封電子郵件給外教Peter，請(qǐng)他幫忙修改演講比賽稿。

第一步：審題

體裁：應(yīng)用文

時(shí)態(tài)：根據(jù)提示，時(shí)態(tài)應(yīng)為一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)

結(jié)構(gòu)：總分法

總分法指把主題句作為總說(shuō)，把支持句作為分說(shuō)，并以這種方式安排所寫(xiě)內(nèi)容。

要求：1. 是否可以給Peter發(fā)演講稿；

2. 演講比賽的主題及舉行時(shí)間；

3. 請(qǐng)求幫忙修改演講比賽稿。

第二步:列提綱 （重點(diǎn)詞組）

National English Speech Contest；enable sb. to do sth.；cherish this opportunity；be satisfactory to sb.；limited knowledge

第三步：連詞成句

1. I’m writing to ask if I can email you my speech written for the annual National English Speech Contest,

2. The contest, which will be held on May 25, enables me to improve my English and other skills.

3. I cherish this opportunity and worked tirelessly to rewrite the speech several times.

4. But it is still far from satisfactory to me;

5. it does not seem sufficiently expressive as expected because of my limited knowledge of the English language.

(根據(jù)提示及關(guān)鍵詞（組）進(jìn)行遣詞造句，注意主謂一致和時(shí)態(tài)問(wèn)題。）

第四步：連句成篇（銜接詞）

1.表文章結(jié)構(gòu)順序：First of all, Firstly/First, Secondly/Second… And then, Finally, In the end, At last, Last but not least

2.表并列補(bǔ)充關(guān)系：What is more, Besides, Moreover, Furthermore, In addition, As well as, not only…but (also), including, also

3.表轉(zhuǎn)折對(duì)比關(guān)系：However, On the contrary, but, Although + clause (從句), In spite of + n/doing, On the one hand…,On the other hand… Some…,while others…,as for, so…that…

4.表因果關(guān)系：Because, As, So, Thus, Therefore, As a result

5表?yè)Q一種方式表達(dá)：In other words, that is to say,

6.表進(jìn)行舉例說(shuō)明：For example; For instance; such as + n/doing

7.表陳述事實(shí)：In fact, frankly speaking

8.表選擇：either…or…，or

連句成文，注意使用恰當(dāng)?shù)倪B詞進(jìn)行句子之間的銜接與過(guò)渡，書(shū)寫(xiě)一定要規(guī)范清晰。

第五步：潤(rùn)色修改