Question

請(qǐng)根據(jù)以下提示，并結(jié)合事例，用英語(yǔ)寫一篇短文。

Not everyone is lucky. We should express sympathy（n.同情）for the persons who are unlucky, no matter whether they are family members or complete strangers. In this way, we can help to make the world a better place.

注意：① 無(wú)需寫標(biāo)題，不得照抄英語(yǔ)提示語(yǔ)；

② 除詩(shī)歌外，文體不限；

③ 文中不得透露個(gè)人姓名和學(xué)校名稱；

④ 詞數(shù)為120左右。

Answer 1

In our daily life, no matter who is unfortunate, we should show sympathy for him and do our best to help him.

Last month, Wang Lin, who is one of my classmates, suddenly fell ill and was in urgent need of an operation. However, his family was too poor to afford the expenses. Many teachers and classmates donated some money to him and he was operated on in time. In addition, we looked after him in turn when he was in hospital. With us tending him, he recovered quickly.

As long as everyone can express sympathy and love for the unfortunate, our society will be a better place for us to live in.

【解析】

試題解析：對(duì)于此類短文寫作，應(yīng)注意措辭得體，時(shí)態(tài)正確。題目已經(jīng)給大致內(nèi)容，寫作時(shí)要注意適當(dāng)增加內(nèi)容，以保證文章的連貫性。【亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明】：第一段第一句In our daily life, no matter who is unfortunate, we should show sympathy for him and do our best to help him. 使用no matter who句式做插入語(yǔ)，使句子生動(dòng)貼切，強(qiáng)調(diào)所表達(dá)內(nèi)容；do one’s best to do sth 為固定短語(yǔ)，表示盡最大努力做某事。第二段第一句Last month, Wang Lin, who is one of my classmates, suddenly fell ill and was in urgent need of an operation.十分精彩，就用一個(gè)定語(yǔ)從句就表達(dá)出了Wang Lin近況，顯示作者嫻熟的技巧。第二段第五句With us tending him, he recovered quickly. 使用獨(dú)立主格，結(jié)構(gòu)為with+名詞+v-ing，顯示出作者深厚功底。第三段第一句As long as everyone can express sympathy and love for the unfortunate, our society will be a better place for us to live in. 使用as long as 引導(dǎo)條件狀語(yǔ)從句，明確表示出作者對(duì)未來(lái)的希冀和美好愿望。短語(yǔ)的運(yùn)用也十分出彩，fall ill生病, in need of需要，too…to…太…而不能…,look after照顧, in turn輪流等使用也為文章添色不少。However, in addition等詞的使用文章條理清晰、結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊�？偨Y(jié)：寫作時(shí)要學(xué)會(huì)將多個(gè)簡(jiǎn)單句合并成一個(gè)復(fù)雜句，多使用不同的句式。

考點(diǎn)：考查短文寫作。