Question

19．你身邊很多同學(xué)視力低下，需戴近視眼鏡．請就這一現(xiàn)象寫一篇英語課前演講稿，內(nèi)容包括以下方面：1．目前同學(xué)的視力狀況    2．青少年視力低下的主要原因     3．保護視力的建議
注意：
   1．詞數(shù)120左右，開頭和結(jié)尾已為你寫好（不計入總詞數(shù)）
   2．可根據(jù)內(nèi)容要點適當(dāng)增加細節(jié)，使行文連貫．
參考詞匯：vision視力        short-sighted 近視眼（的）
Dear classmates，have you noticed the phenomenon that                                                   
Thank you for listening!

Answer 1

分析 本篇書面表達屬于提綱類作文，根據(jù)提示信息你身邊很多同學(xué)視力低下，需戴近視眼鏡．請就這一現(xiàn)象寫一篇英語課前演講稿，寫作時注意以下幾點：1、仔細閱讀有關(guān)提示，弄清試題提供的所有信息，要點包括：目前同學(xué)的視力狀況    青少年視力低下的主要原因     保護視力的建議2、提綱是文章的總體框架，要在提綱的范圍內(nèi)進行分析、構(gòu)思和想象．要依據(jù)提示情景或詞語，按照一定邏輯關(guān)系來寫．本文寫作時可以按照要點所給的順序?qū)懀?、根據(jù)要表達的內(nèi)容確定句子的時態(tài)、語態(tài)．4．注意使用高級詞匯和句式，以增加文章的亮點．
【亮點說明】本文結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊，層次分明，而且使用了多種表達：get a good habit of 養(yǎng)成一個好的習(xí)慣；play computer games玩電腦游戲；however然而；Secondly其次；In addition另外；
This is because they don't get a good habit of reading or they overuse their eyes watching TV or playing computer games．（高分句型一）
Having a distant look at intervals during the class break is equally important．（高分句型二）
 It is high time that we took quick actions to protect our vision!（高分句型三）

解答 Dear classmates，
       Have you noticed the phenomena that more and more teenagers around us wear glasses？Some of them got short-sighted even at a very young age．This is because they don't get a good habit of reading or they overuse their eyes watching TV or playing computer games．（高分句型一）
       But how to protect our vision？What can we do for good eyesight？Perhaps there are some ways for me to keep good vision．However，taking regular outdoor activities is an evident solution．Secondly，eye-care exercises twice a day may not be neglected．Having a distant look at intervals during the class break is equally important．（高分句型二）In addition，don't read in light which is either too dim or too bright．Don't read in the bed or in a moving car．
       It is high time that we took quick actions to protect our vision!（高分句型三）
       Thank you for listening!

點評 英語寫作是一項主觀性較強的測試題．它不僅考查學(xué)生的寫作基礎(chǔ)而且還考查學(xué)生在寫作過程中綜合運用語言的能力．在撰寫時要注意主謂語一致，時態(tài)呼應(yīng)，用詞貼切等．要提高英語寫作水平，需要兩方面的訓(xùn)練：一是語言基礎(chǔ)方面的訓(xùn)練，要有扎實的造句、翻譯等基本功，即用詞法、句法等知識造出正確無誤的句子；二是寫作知識和能力 方面的訓(xùn)練以掌握寫作方面的基本方法和技巧．