Question

12．假如你是一只瀕臨滅絕的華南虎，面對(duì)惡劣的生活環(huán)境，你決定給人類寫一封信，希望能提高人類保護(hù)動(dòng)物的意識(shí)．信的內(nèi)容如下：
（1）過去的美好時(shí)光：綠色的森林，清新的空氣，自由的生活；
（2）人類對(duì)自己和家人的傷害：（1）過度捕獵；
（2）破壞棲息地；
（3）終日生活在饑餓和擔(dān)驚受怕中．
（3）懇請(qǐng)人類保護(hù)動(dòng)物，與它們和諧相處．
注意：（1）詞數(shù)100左右；
（2）可以適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，以使行文連貫；
（3）開頭和結(jié)尾已為你寫好，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)．
Dear man，
I'm the South China tiger，an endangered animal．I'm writing to tell you something about my poor living environment which results from you cruel activities．
Looking back，how wonderful it was for us to enjoy the green forest，the fresh air and the free life．However，you hunt too much，decreasing the number of us．Besides，you cut down the trees，wh ich destroyed our habitat．It is your human activities that push us to the edge of extinction．My famil y and I are living in hunger and fear all day long．
I strongly appeal to you to protect us but not to hurt us．It's our hope that we can live in harmony with each other．
Looking forward to your concern for us!
Yours，
South China tiger．

Answer 1

分析 這是一只瀕臨滅絕的華南虎給人類寫一封信．根據(jù)題目要求可知用第一人稱和一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)態(tài)．內(nèi)容包括：一點(diǎn)明書信目的；二過去的美好時(shí)光以及現(xiàn)在人類對(duì)自己和家人的傷害；三懇請(qǐng)人類保護(hù)動(dòng)物，與動(dòng)物們和諧相處．
高分句型：
1．I'm writing to tell you something about my poor living environment which results from you cruel activities．句子里which引導(dǎo)定語從句，代指先行詞 my poor living environment； results from 表示"由于"．
我寫信是告訴你，由于你們殘忍的行為造成我們的環(huán)境惡化．
2．It is your human activities that push us to the edge of extinction句子里It is 和that構(gòu)成強(qiáng)調(diào)句式，強(qiáng)調(diào)主語your human activities；the edge of extinction表示"滅絕的邊緣"．
是你們?nèi)祟惖幕顒?dòng)使我們到了滅絕的邊緣．

解答 Dear man，
       I'm the South China tiger，an endangered animal． I'm writing to tell you something about my poor living environment which results from you cruel activities．【高分句型一】（點(diǎn)明書信目的）
       Looking back，how wonderful it was for us to enjoy the green forest，the fresh air and the free life．However，you hunt too much，decreasing the number of us．Besides，you cut down the trees，wh ich destroyed our habitat．It is your human activities that push us to the edge of extinction．【高分句型二】My famil y and I are living in hunger and fear all day long．（過去的美好時(shí)光以及現(xiàn)在人類對(duì)自己和家人的傷害）
       I strongly appeal to you to protect us but not to hurt us．It's our hope that we can live in harmony with each other．（懇請(qǐng)人類保護(hù)動(dòng)物，與動(dòng)物們和諧相處）
       Looking forward to your concern for us!
Yours，
South China tiger

點(diǎn)評(píng) 考查提綱類作文．
寫作的第一步是審題，我們要弄清楚該用的人稱，時(shí)態(tài)以及要點(diǎn)，然后列出提綱；根據(jù)提綱寫出草稿，改正錯(cuò)誤以后，才能寫作答題紙上．