Question

假設(shè)你是新華中學(xué)的學(xué)生李華，你周末滑冰時(shí)不慎將胳膊摔折，因而未能參加英語(yǔ)考試。請(qǐng)根據(jù)以下要點(diǎn)給你的外籍教師Mrs．Clemens寫一封電子郵件：
1．表達(dá)歉意并解釋缺考原因；
2．詢問補(bǔ)考時(shí)間及課外作業(yè)(如閱讀書目、作業(yè)要求等)。
注意：
1．詞數(shù)：l20—150；
2．可以適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，以使行文連貫。
Dear Mrs．Clemens，

Answer 1

One possible version:
Dear Mrs.Clemens,
I’m writing to make an apology to you .Much as I like your English class , I was absent from your test .Last weekend , I was happily skating when suddenly I fell by accident and had my left arm broken.
I’d like to ask you to give me a chance to take a make-up test .Please let me know when it is convenient for you after you make the arrangement .In addition , I’d also like to know your homework for me , such as the reading list for books and the essay to write .Finally , I’d appreciate it if you could tell me the requirements for homework.
I’m sorry to have to put you to so much trouble .Wish you all the best !
Looking forward to your early reply .
Your.
Li Hua

試題分析：電子郵件是一種常見的寫作體裁，要求語(yǔ)言簡(jiǎn)潔明了、通俗易懂，而且要開門見山提出寫信的目的。就本篇書面表達(dá)而言，在寫作時(shí)要注意兩個(gè)方面的要點(diǎn)，一是表達(dá)歉意并解釋缺考原因；二是詢問補(bǔ)考的相關(guān)信息，所以在語(yǔ)言上要格外注意委婉禮貌，可以使用的禮貌用語(yǔ)：Would you please …..; I would appreciate it if ….; I will be grateful if you can …;Do you mind doing …..等等。在結(jié)構(gòu)安排上可以分兩段分別介紹兩個(gè)要點(diǎn)，然后禮貌地用looking forward to your reply來(lái)結(jié)束郵件內(nèi)容。在時(shí)態(tài)選擇上前半部分解釋原因時(shí)要使用一般過去時(shí)，而后半部分則可以使用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)態(tài)；此外，寫作時(shí)還要注意恰當(dāng)使用連接詞，以使文章語(yǔ)言連貫流暢。
【亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明】本篇范文語(yǔ)言自然流暢、文字通俗簡(jiǎn)練，語(yǔ)氣禮貌委婉，符合這類郵件內(nèi)容對(duì)語(yǔ)言的要求。本文開門見山向老師表示了歉意，然后做進(jìn)一步解釋，在下一段中詢問了一些自己想了解的問題，在結(jié)構(gòu)安排上條理性較強(qiáng)，而且在段中使用in addition、also、finally等連接詞，使文章層次清晰，上下文銜接自然。此外，作者還使用了讓步狀語(yǔ)從句much as I like your class，時(shí)間狀語(yǔ)從句when suddenly I fell by accident and had my left arm broken.和經(jīng)典句式I’d appreciate it if you could tell me the requirements for homework.，祈使句Wish you all the best !等，成功地做到了句式的多變，也造就了文章的亮點(diǎn)。