Question

假設(shè)你是李華，在一個(gè)禮品網(wǎng)站為你的姐姐訂購了一份生日禮物。禮物是一個(gè)標(biāo)有姓名、生日及祝福語的有卡通動(dòng)物形象的粉色杯子。收到禮物后你和姐姐都很滿意。請給你的英國筆友Johnson發(fā)一封郵件，內(nèi)容包括以下要點(diǎn)：
1.描述網(wǎng)購的禮物； 2.介紹網(wǎng)上支付及配送情況； 3.談?wù)勀銓?duì)網(wǎng)上購物的看法。
注意：1.詞數(shù)100左右；開頭和結(jié)尾已給出，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)；
2.可適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，以使行文連貫。
3.支付寶安全控件 Alipay Security Control
Dear Johnson,
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Yours sincerely,
Li Hu

Answer 1

Dear Johnson,
I ordered a birthday gift for my sister on the internet three days ago. It is a beautiful pink cup decorated with my sister’s name, her date of birth, and some best wishes to her as well. It’s so lovely a cup with a picture of a cartoon dog on it that both my sister and I likes it at the first sight.
Besides, I am very satisfied with Alipay Security Control, which is very convenient and safe. And so is the delivery service. I have received the cup within two days. Don’t you think it’s very fast?
I have enjoyed shoppingonline very much through this experience ,. There is no doubt that more and more people prefer shopping online nowadays .We don’t have to spend much time going to the shops or markets with such a good variety of choices on the internet. Agree with me?
I’m looking forward to your early reply.
Yours sincerely,
Li Hua

解析試題分析：考查應(yīng)用文中的書信的寫作。要求給你的英國筆友Johnson發(fā)一封郵件，。介紹你網(wǎng)上購物的情況和你對(duì)網(wǎng)上購物的看法。要點(diǎn)都已經(jīng)給出，要表達(dá)清楚，不要有遺漏，審題時(shí)注意時(shí)態(tài)的選擇，如果是講述自己的網(wǎng)購經(jīng)歷，就是一般過去式，如果是介紹自己對(duì)網(wǎng)購的看法，就是一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)，描述要盡量選擇簡潔的語言，運(yùn)用合適的語法規(guī)則和詞匯把各要點(diǎn)都準(zhǔn)確表述出。難點(diǎn)在于選擇詞匯和句型，可以靈活運(yùn)用高級(jí)詞匯和固定短語準(zhǔn)確表述。還要用適當(dāng)?shù)倪B接詞把句子連接起來，象for instance, Furthermore,等詞，這樣文章顯得更連貫。
【亮點(diǎn)說明】范文中使用了一些高級(jí)詞匯和復(fù)雜句型，如：It is a beautiful pink cup decorated with my sister’s name, her date of birth, and some best wishes to her as well. 這句話用過去分詞做定語，It’s so lovely a cup with a picture of a cartoon dog on it that both my sister and I likes it at the first sight.這句話用了so ….that….句型， I am very satisfied with Alipay Security Control, which is very convenient and safe. 這句話用了非限制性定語從句，And so is the delivery service.這句話用了倒裝句， There is no doubt that more and more people prefer shopping online nowadays .這句話用了固定句型，此外，范文還使用了 Besides,這樣的關(guān)聯(lián)詞，使文章更加連貫。
考點(diǎn)：考查書信類作文