Question

閱讀下面的短文，然后按照要求寫一篇150詞左右的英語短文。
As we all know, the “(passenger) transport during the Spring Festival period” has been a hot phrase all through the China land.
The volume of passenger traffic(客運量) reaches its climax before and after the Spring Festival. Especially, the number of those who decide to go back to their hometown by train is increasing rapidly, so it promotes the short of the tickets of passenger train. Luckily, the Ministry of Railways(鐵道部) has come up with solutions. For instance, it arranges extra trains during the peak time for passenger transport as well as opens 24-hour ticket sales windows for passengers in order to ease the traffic pressure. Moreover, it helps to deliver train tickets to the doorsteps, providing convenience for passengers.
One thing that has to be mentioned this year is about start of selling tickets on-line this year. For one thing, it to some degree shortens the time of purchasing tickets. However, most of the passengers are migrant workers returning home for Spring Festival. They are not familiar with the process of buying tickets and as a result cannot buy the tickets on time. What is worse, many computers selling tickets broke down under too much pressure of operation. Therefore, many people blame such a method in that it doesn’t suit nowadays’ situation.
[寫作內(nèi)容]
以約30個詞概括上文的主要內(nèi)容。
以約120個詞對“春運”進(jìn)一步敘寫，內(nèi)容包括：
自己親身經(jīng)歷或者聽聞的一次火車春運的狀況；
“網(wǎng)上售票”引起人們不滿的原因；
給鐵道部或者農(nóng)民工提出解決“網(wǎng)上購票”問題的合理化建議。
[寫作要求]
作文中可以使用親身經(jīng)歷或者虛構(gòu)的故事，也可以參照閱讀材料的內(nèi)容，但不得直接引用原文中的句子；
作文中不能出現(xiàn)真實姓名和學(xué)校名稱。
[評分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)]
概括準(zhǔn)確，語言規(guī)范，內(nèi)容合適，語句連貫。

Answer 1

Although it is as crowded as usual during the “transport during the Spring Festival period”, many solutions have been raised. But this year, with another problem of buying tickets on-line appearing, many are dissatisfied.
Last year, I, together with my parents, went to our hometown by train. At that time, you can imagine how crowded it was in the railway station and how difficult it was for us to buy a ticket. Worse still, it was raining and we had to wait in queue patiently for our turn to buy tickets. This year, things are much better. We can buy tickets through Internet. However, some other problems appear.
Reasons for the problems of buying tickets on-line are divided. For migrant workers, lacking the knowledge of handling computers has trapped them into trouble. Also, the ticket-selling system is not advanced enough to cope with difficult situations.
To solve the problem, I suggest that not only should the Ministry of Railways update or better the ticket-selling system regularly but also provide more convenient and easy ways for migrant workers to buy tickets. As for migrant workers, they can learn to purchase their tickets on-line with the help of Internet or co-workers. Choosing other means of transportation to return back is also available.

試題分析：本文屬于讀寫任務(wù)寫作，動筆前，一定要認(rèn)真閱讀原文，并理解內(nèi)容。認(rèn)真看清題目要求，這篇書面表達(dá)給了一段材料：先要求以約30個詞概括上文的主要內(nèi)容，要求有很高的概括提煉的能力，要抓住文章的主題，再以約120個詞寫一篇短文，按照要點去表達(dá)，不能有遺漏，寫作時注意準(zhǔn)確運用時態(tài)，上下文意思連貫，符合邏輯關(guān)系。寫作時盡量使用自己會的單詞、詞組和句型，同時也要注意使用一些高級語法和句型，使自己的文章更有文采。
【亮點說明】文章簡潔的總結(jié)了所給材料，語言規(guī)范，內(nèi)容合適，語篇連貫，使用了詞組和句型：cope with 處理，As for 至于，with the help of 在…的幫助下，Worse still更糟糕的是,  But this year, with another problem of buying tickets on-line appearing, many are dissatisfied. 這句話用了with復(fù)合結(jié)構(gòu)， At that time, you can imagine how crowded it was in the railway station and how difficult it was for us to buy a ticket.這句話用了賓語從句和it做形式主語， For migrant workers, lacking the knowledge of handling computers has trapped them into trouble. 這句話用了動名詞做主語， To solve the problem, I suggest that not only should the Ministry of Railways update or better the ticket-selling system regularly but also provide more convenient and easy ways for migrant workers to buy tickets.這句話用了不定式做目的狀語。