Question

【題目】假定你是李華，前不久利用國(guó)慶假期與家人外出游玩并入住某國(guó)際連鎖酒店。下面是酒店的經(jīng)理Mr.Wayne在最近給你發(fā)來征求反饋意見的電子郵件。請(qǐng)根據(jù)以下要點(diǎn)寫一封回郵：

1.對(duì)本次酒店入住體驗(yàn)表示肯定；

2.酒店的免費(fèi)WiFi只在公共區(qū)域提供，而房間WiFi收費(fèi)過高，希望改進(jìn)；

3.祝愿酒店越辦越好。

Dear Li Hua,

Thank you for your recent stay at Hotel Westin,where you spent your holiday from Oct 1st to Oct 3rd.We would greatly appreciate it if you would take the time to give some feelback on your stay,which will help us to improve our service.

Do you like the facilities of the hotel?

Do you enjoy the food of the hotel restaurant?

Are you satisfied with the service of the hotel staff?

Any other advice?

Thank you for your time.We look forward to welcoming you back to Westin in the near future.

Sincerely,

Bruce Wayne.

洼意：

1.詞數(shù)100左右；

2.可以適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，以使行文連貫；

3.郵件開頭和結(jié)尾已為你寫好，不計(jì)入詞數(shù)。

Dear Mr.Wayne,

Thank you for your E-mail and I am glad to give feedback on my recent stay at HotelWestin.

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Yours faithfully,

Li Hua

Answer 1

【答案】Dear Mr.Wayne,

Thank you for your E-mail and I am glad to give feedback on my recent stay at Hotel Merry Time.

There is no denying that my 3-day stay at your hotel has been the most memorable time in my holidays. Featuring modern facilities and stylish decoration,Westin guaranteed my families comfort and relaxation. Furthermore,we enjoyed the tasteful dishes of the hotel restaurant where various cuisines are served.Of all the advantages,the most impressive is the helpful staff.It was your hospitality and consideration on everyday basis that made me feel at home.

However,there is room for improvement as for the WiFi service,since the free WiFi access is only available in public area and the paid WiFi service in guest room is overcharged.

I hope my feedback would be of great help to your better service and business.

Yours faithfully,

Li Hua

【解析】這是一篇書信類作文。試題是主人公李華給一家國(guó)際連鎖酒店回復(fù)的電子郵件，回復(fù)動(dòng)筆前，首先要仔細(xì)審題：審要求，審文體，審時(shí)態(tài)，審人稱。其次。抓中心，列重點(diǎn)。寫作時(shí)要，緊扣要點(diǎn)。同時(shí)，盡可能使句子的表達(dá)形式多樣化，提高書面表達(dá)的檔次和可讀性。

【范文亮點(diǎn)】

1. 要點(diǎn)齊全，結(jié)構(gòu)完整，行文流暢。文中使用了大量短語使用多種句式。例如：定語從句：where various cuisines are served；原因狀語since free WiFi access is only available in public area； 強(qiáng)調(diào)句It was your hospitality and consideration on everyday basis that. 動(dòng)名詞作主語Speaking and listening are veryimportant等等。

2. 文中使用了非常好的連接詞，使文章層次清晰，觀點(diǎn)分明，如：Undoubtedly,； However, I hope等等。