Question

11．教育部征集高中生對于高中畢業(yè)后不直接上大學(xué)而是休整一年（gap year）的意見和看法．你作為光明中學(xué)的班長李華整理了同學(xué)們的意見并給教育部回信．要點如下：
1．同學(xué)們非常支持休整一年，希望擁有這一年的自由時光．
2．同學(xué)們在這一年里準(zhǔn)備做什么．
3．度過休整年的優(yōu)點．
注意：
1．文章開頭已給出，不計入總詞數(shù)；
2．字?jǐn)?shù)：100詞左右．
Dear sir，
I'm LiHua from Guang Ming Middle School．I'm writing to tell you 
                 ．
Yours sincerely，
Li Hua．

Answer 1

分析 本篇書面表達(dá)屬于提綱類作文，根據(jù)提示信息針對高中畢業(yè)后不直接上大學(xué)而是休整一年（gap year）的意見和看法，作為光明中學(xué)的班長李華整理了同學(xué)們的意見并給教育部回信，寫作時注意以下幾點：1、仔細(xì)閱讀有關(guān)提示，弄清試題提供的所有信息，明確幾個要點：同學(xué)們非常支持休整一年，希望擁有這一年的自由時光；同學(xué)們在這一年里準(zhǔn)備做什么；度過休整年的優(yōu)點．2、提綱是文章的總體框架，要在提綱的范圍內(nèi)進(jìn)行分析、構(gòu)思和想象．要依據(jù)提示情景或詞語，按照一定邏輯關(guān)系來寫．本文寫作時可以按照要點所給的順序?qū)懀?、根據(jù)要表達(dá)的內(nèi)容確定句子的時態(tài)、語態(tài)；就本文而言應(yīng)該用一般現(xiàn)在時態(tài)．4．注意使用高級詞匯和句式，以增加文章的亮點．
【亮點說明】本文結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊，層次分明，而且使用了多種表達(dá)：
I'm writing to tell you what we high school students think of having the gap year．（高分句型一）句中使用了what引導(dǎo)的賓語從句
Others prefer to take some jobs so that they are able to make some money and be economically independent．（高分句型二）句中使用了so that引導(dǎo)的結(jié)果狀語從句
By doing what is mentioned above，we students will not only enrich our life and social experience but also temper our sense of independence．（高分句型三）句中使用了not only…but also 連接詞

解答 Dear sir，
     I'm LiHua from Guang Ming Middle School．I'm writing to tell you what we high school students think of having the gap year．（高分句型一）
     Above all，most of us students consider it a brilliant idea to have a gap year before we finally go to our dream college．Some students will travel around our country or even the whole world to relieve the tension and pressure caused by senior academic study．Others prefer to take some jobs so that they are able to make some money and be economically independent．（高分句型二）Still others choose to read more books about their majors they are going to study in university．
     By doing what is mentioned above，we students will not only enrich our life and social experience but also temper our sense of independence．（高分句型三）In one word，we can't wait to spend the gap year in our own way．
                                                                                                                                                    Yours truly，
                                                                                                                                                      Li Hua

點評 英語寫作是一項主觀性較強(qiáng)的測試題．它不僅考查學(xué)生的寫作基礎(chǔ)而且還考查學(xué)生在寫作過程中綜合運(yùn)用語言的能力．在撰寫時要注意主謂語一致，時態(tài)呼應(yīng)，用詞貼切等．要提高英語寫作水平，需要兩方面的訓(xùn)練：一是語言基礎(chǔ)方面的訓(xùn)練，要有扎實的造句、翻譯等基本功，即用詞法、句法等知識造出正確無誤的句子；二是寫作知識和能力 方面的訓(xùn)練以掌握寫作方面的基本方法和技巧