Question

【題目】假如你是李明，你的英國網友Tom參加中國象棋網絡挑戰(zhàn)賽獲得了一等獎。請根據(jù)以下提示寫一封英文電子郵件向他表示祝賀。

1) 祝賀他獲獎；

2) 肯定他付出的努力；

3) 詢問何時方便，在網上切磋棋藝。

注意：

1)詞數(shù)80詞左右；

2)可以適當增加細節(jié)，以使行文連貫；

3)開頭和結尾已為你寫好。

Dear Tom,

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Yours,

Li Ming

Answer 1

【答案】Dear Tom,

I am writing to offer my sincere congratulations to you on your winning the first prize in the Chinese Chess Network Challenge.

For these years, you’ve shown great interest in Chinese chess and kept on practicing it every day. Not only have you read many books about Chinese chess strategy, but also you have competed in all kinds of Chinese chess contest. Finally, you succeeded in winning the online competition!

So I’m so happy that you become champion of this network challenge. At last, I hope to play Chinese chess with you so that we can make progress together. Please tell me when you have time.

Yours,

Li Ming

【解析】

本篇書面表達屬于應用文。要求考生寫一封電子郵件向在中國象棋網絡挑戰(zhàn)賽中獲得了一等獎的英國網友Tom表示祝賀。

第一步：審題

體裁：應用文

時態(tài)：根據(jù)提示，時態(tài)應為一般現(xiàn)在時

結構：總分法

總分法指把主題句作為總說，把支持句作為分說，并以這種方式安排所寫內容。

要求：1. 祝賀他獲獎；

2. 肯定他付出的努力；

3. 詢問何時方便，在網上切磋棋藝。

第二步:列提綱 （重點詞組）

offer sth. to sb.；Chinese Chess Network Challenge；show great interest in sth.；succeed in doing sth.；make progress

第三步：連詞成句

1. I am writing to offer my sincere congratulations to you on your winning the first prize in the Chinese Chess Network Challenge.

2. For these years, you’ve shown great interest in Chinese chess and kept on practicing it every day.

3. Finally, you succeeded in winning the online competition!

4. At last, I hope to play Chinese chess with you so that we can make progress together.

(根據(jù)提示及關鍵詞（組）進行遣詞造句，注意主謂一致和時態(tài)問題。）

第四步：連句成篇（銜接詞）

1.表文章結構順序：First of all, Firstly/First, Secondly/Second… And then, Finally, In the end, At last, Last but not least

2.表并列補充關系：What is more, Besides, Moreover, Furthermore, In addition, As well as, not only…but (also), including, also

3.表轉折對比關系：However, On the contrary, but, Although + clause (從句), In spite of + n/doing, On the one hand…,On the other hand… Some…,while others…,as for, so…that…

4.表因果關系：Because, As, So, Thus, Therefore, As a result

5表換一種方式表達：In other words, that is to say,

6.表進行舉例說明：For example; For instance; such as + n/doing

7.表陳述事實：In fact, frankly speaking

8.表選擇：either…or…，or

連句成文，注意使用恰當?shù)倪B詞進行句子之間的銜接與過渡，書寫一定要規(guī)范清晰。

第五步：潤色修改