Question

6．假定你是李華，你的加拿大筆友Jack來信說他在學校舉行的詩歌朗誦賽（poetry recital contest）中獲得了一等獎． 請用英語給他寫一封電子郵件表示祝賀．
內容主要包括：
1．表達你的祝賀；
2．欽佩他的付出；
3．請他給你推薦一些英語詩歌．
注意1．詞數(shù)100左右；
2．可適當增加細節(jié)以使行文連貫；
Dear Jack，
I am glad to hear that you won first prize in the poetry recital contest held inyour school．（高分句型一） Please accept my sincere congratulations．It is indeed a remarkable thing for you to have achieved so great a success considering you once had great trouble reading poems out loud and were scared to speak in public．（高分句型二）It must feel great to finally see your efforts pay off．Your success again proved that where there is a will，there is a way．（高分句型三）By the way，I have become interested in English poems recently．So would you please recommend some good English poems to me？
Yours，
Li Hua．

Answer 1

分析 本篇書面表達屬于提綱類作文，根據(jù)提示信息假定你是李華，你的加拿大筆友Jack來信說他在學校舉行的詩歌朗誦賽（poetry recital contest）中獲得了一等獎． 請用英語給他寫一封電子郵件表示祝賀，寫作時注意以下幾點：1、仔細閱讀有關提示，弄清試題提供的所有信息，要點包括：表達你的祝賀；欽佩他的付出；請他給你推薦一些英語詩歌．2、提綱是文章的總體框架，要在提綱的范圍內進行分析、構思和想象．要依據(jù)提示情景或詞語，按照一定邏輯關系來寫．本文寫作時可以按照要點所給的順序寫．3、根據(jù)要表達的內容確定句子的時態(tài)、語態(tài)．4．注意使用高級詞匯和句式，以增加文章的亮點．
【亮點說明】本文結構緊湊，層次分明，而且使用了多種表達：first prize 一等獎；considering考慮到，鑒于；have great trouble in doing sth在做某事方面有麻煩；By the way順便說一下；become interested in對…感興趣；
I am glad to hear that you won first prize in the poetry recital contest held in your school．（高分句型一）
It is indeed a remarkable thing for you to have achieved so great a success considering you once had great trouble reading poems out loud and were scared to speak in public．（高分句型二）
It must feel great to finally see your efforts pay off．Your success again proved that where there is a will，there is a way．（高分句型三

解答 Dear Jack，
       I am glad to hear that you won first prize in the poetry recital contest held in your school．（高分句型一） Please accept my sincere congratulations．It is indeed a remarkable thing for you to have achieved so great a success considering you once had great trouble reading poems out loud and were scared to speak in public．（高分句型二）It must feel great to finally see your efforts pay off．Your success again proved that where there is a will，there is a way．（高分句型三）By the way，I have become interested in English poems recently．So would you please recommend some good English poems to me？
                                                                                                                                                                                                        Yours，
                                                                                                                                                                                                        Li Hua

點評 英語寫作是一項主觀性較強的測試題．它不僅考查學生的寫作基礎而且還考查學生在寫作過程中綜合運用語言的能力．在撰寫時要注意主謂語一致，時態(tài)呼應，用詞貼切等．要提高英語寫作水平，需要兩方面的訓練：一是語言基礎方面的訓練，要有扎實的造句、翻譯等基本功，即用詞法、句法等知識造出正確無誤的句子；二是寫作知識和能力 方面的訓練以掌握寫作方面的基本方法和技巧．