Question

【題目】 假如你是李華，最近你在瀏覽一個新西蘭中學網(wǎng)站時，看到一位名叫Tom的中學生的留言，他計劃在暑假期間到中國的北京旅游，希望能有一名中國留學生做他的導游。你對此很感興趣，請根據(jù)以下要點提示寫一封e-mail給他，介紹你的相關(guān)情況。

主要內(nèi)容包括：

1．希望做他的導游；

2．打算如何給他做導游；

3．期盼他的回復。

注意：

1．詞數(shù)100左右；

2．可適當增加情節(jié)，以使行文連貫；

3．信的開頭已為你寫好。

Dear Tom,

Recently, while browsing a senior high school website of New Zealand, I saw the message you posted on it．

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Yours sincerely,

Li Hua

Answer 1

【答案】

Dear Tom,

Recently, while browsing a senior high school website of New Zealand, I saw the message you posted on it．I get to know your wishes that you intend to travel in Beijing during the summer vacation with a Chinese student as your guide．

Learning this news, I am really willing to travel with you and introduce Beijing to you．I know as a brilliant guide I am supposed to make your journey interesting and meaningful．For one thing, I will keep you company visiting numerous great places of interest and enjoying the wonderful sightseeing．For another, I am going to tell you the long and rich history of Beijing．

I am looking forward to the reply from you．With all my wishes you could give me this honor．

Yours sincerely,

Li Hua

【解析】

試題分析：本次作文為提綱作文。寫作要點為：1.希望做他的導游；2．打算如何給他做導游；3．期盼他的回復。應(yīng)注意不同時態(tài)的正確使用、表述的層次感、詞語的運用及句子的銜接。

寫作亮點：該范文要點全面，采用三段式結(jié)構(gòu)清晰、重點突出。使用For one thing, 及For another讓文章層次感強。非謂語“while browsing a senior high school website of New Zealand”, “Learning this news”,“ visiting numerous great places of interest and enjoying the wonderful sightseeing”；定語從句“I saw the message you posted on it．”同位語從句“I get to know your wishes that you intend to travel in Beijing during the summer vacation with a Chinese student as your guide．”的使用，提升了文章的檔次，為文章增色不少！