Question

12．Long ago God had a great many burdens which he wished to have carried from one place to another on the earth，so he asked the animals to lend a hand．But all of them began to make excuses for not helping：the elephant was too dignified； the lion，too proud； and so on．Finally the birds came to God and said，"If you will tie the burdens into small bundles，we'll be glad to carry them for you．We are small but we would like to help．"So God fastened upon the back of each one a small bundle，and they all set out walking across the plain to their destination．They sang as they went，and did not seem to feel the weight of their burdens at all．Every day the burdens seemed lighter and lighter until the loads seems to be lifting the birds，instead of the birds carrying the burdens．When they arrived at their destination，they discovered that when they removed their loads，there were wings in their place．It was the wings that enabled them to fly to the sky．
【寫作內(nèi)容】
1．以約30詞左右概括短文的主要內(nèi)容；
2．然后以約120詞就"Burdens Give Us Wings"這個(gè)主題寫一篇短文，包括如下要點(diǎn)：
（1）你在生活中或?qū)W習(xí)上有什么負(fù)擔(dān)？你怎樣看待它們？
（2）你認(rèn)為怎樣做可以將負(fù)擔(dān)變成翅膀．
【寫作要求】
1．作文中可以使用親身經(jīng)歷或虛構(gòu)的故事，也可以參照閱讀材料的內(nèi)容，但不得直接引用原文中的句子．
2．作文中不得出現(xiàn)真實(shí)姓名和學(xué)校名稱．
【評(píng)分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)】
概括準(zhǔn)確，語(yǔ)言規(guī)范，內(nèi)容合適，語(yǔ)篇連貫．
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Answer 1

分析 本文是一篇讀寫任務(wù)作文，根據(jù)所提供的材料信息，以"Burdens Give Us Wings"為主題，寫一篇短文．寫作時(shí)，應(yīng)以第一人稱為主，時(shí)態(tài)為一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)，寫作要點(diǎn)：1．概括所給短文主要內(nèi)容；2．寫出自己在生活，學(xué)習(xí)上的負(fù)擔(dān)；3．對(duì)負(fù)擔(dān)的看法；3．怎樣做可以將負(fù)擔(dān)變?yōu)槌岚颍?br />重點(diǎn)短語(yǔ)：
volunteer to （志愿做…） be burdened with（有…負(fù)擔(dān)） from my own perspective（依我看） as long as  （只有） in a word（總之）
高分句型：
1．Unexpectedly，wings replaced the loads afterwards，which enabled the birds to fly．該句靈活運(yùn)用高級(jí)詞匯及非限制性定語(yǔ)從句．
2．But as I always focus on the sunny side of life，I see these inevitable burdens as opportunities to learn more knowledge，gain more experience and thus grow more and more mature．該句靈活運(yùn)用高級(jí)詞匯及短語(yǔ)，屬于復(fù)雜長(zhǎng)句．
3．For another，once we decide on a worthwhile goal，we should keep the faith that as long as we shoulder any loads with a light heart，we will make it eventually．

解答 Burdens Give Us Wings
The legend states that unlike other animals，the birds volunteered to help God carry the burdens to the destination merrily．Unexpectedly，wings replaced the loads afterwards，which enabled the birds to fly．（高分句型1）（介紹短文主要內(nèi)容）
It's true that everyone，willingly or unwillingly，carries burdens of this or that kind，and I am no exception．I am burdened with endless homework，unsatisfactory performance，and sometimes disagreements with my family．But as I always focus on the sunny side of life，I see these inevitable burdens as opportunities to learn more knowledge，gain more experience and thus grow more and more mature．（高分句型2）（自己的負(fù)擔(dān)和看法）
From my own perspective，taking advantage of the burdens properly，we can turn them into wings that help us fly closer and closer to our goals．For one thing，we should treat various burdens differently，only taking seriously those worth struggling for and letting go of the unimportant and unnecessary．For another，once we decide on a worthwhile goal，we should keep the faith that as long as we shoulder any loads with a light heart，we will make it eventually．（高分句型3）（如何將負(fù)擔(dān)變?yōu)槌岚颍?br />In a word，burdens can give us wings if we treat them properly．（總結(jié)）

點(diǎn)評(píng) 讀寫任務(wù)作文在寫作時(shí)要注意內(nèi)容是否包含了所給要點(diǎn)，寫作時(shí)注意正確運(yùn)用時(shí)態(tài)，上下文意思連貫，符合邏輯關(guān)系，盡量使用自己熟悉的單詞，句式，同時(shí)也要注意使用高級(jí)詞匯使文章顯得更有檔次，平時(shí)需注意積累短語(yǔ)和重要句型．