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11．"世界上最遙遠(yuǎn)的距離不是生與死，而是我在你面前，你卻在低頭玩手機(jī)"．這個網(wǎng)絡(luò)上流行的說法正是很多人真實(shí)生活的寫照．一項(xiàng)網(wǎng)絡(luò)調(diào)查顯示，許多中國人自清晨至深夜一天都有手機(jī)相伴，"手機(jī)依賴癥"已經(jīng)成為社會"流行病"．
1．描述這一現(xiàn)象；
2．分析其原因及弊端
3．你認(rèn)為該如何改變這種現(xiàn)狀．
注意：1．詞數(shù)100左右；
      2．可以適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，以使行文連貫．
                                                                                    

Answer 1

分析 （高分句型一） As is often the case，when people are attending meetings，having meals or waiting for buses，you can always find them addicted to their phones，completely ignoring others．
As is often the case…該句型是as引導(dǎo)的非限制性定語從句；還使用了when引導(dǎo)的時間狀語從句；find sb addicted to 發(fā)現(xiàn)某人沉迷于…；ignoring others為現(xiàn)在分詞做狀語表示伴隨．
（高分句型二）The reason is that smart phones nowadays enable people to play mobile games and keep in touch with friends through QQ and Wechat．
the reason is that…使用了that引導(dǎo)的一個表語從句；
（高分句型三）Moreover，people addicted to their phones fail to communicate well with those around them in the real world．
該句型使用了addicted to…短語做people的定語，表示沉迷于手機(jī)的人．
重點(diǎn)短語：be addicted to沉迷于；a common phenomenon 一個普遍的現(xiàn)象；keep in touch with 于…保持聯(lián)系；
過渡詞：Moreover表示遞進(jìn)；However表轉(zhuǎn)折；Meanwhile 與此同時．

解答 （高分句型一） As is often the case，when people are attending meetings，having meals or waiting for buses，you can always find them addicted to their phones，completely ignoring others．
    This is really a common phenomenon in our life．（高分句型二）The reason is that smart phones nowadays enable people to play mobile games and keep in touch with friends through QQ and Wechat．However，too much exposure to phones is bad for people in terms of health．（高分句型三）Moreover，people addicted to their phones fail to communicate well with those around them in the real world．
     As far as I am concerned，people should wisely make use of their phones to help with their work and study．Meanwhile care more about their family and friends rather than mobile phones．

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