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4．假定你校將舉行一個(gè)成人儀式，你將作為代表在儀式上發(fā)言，請(qǐng)你按以下內(nèi)容要點(diǎn)準(zhǔn)備一篇英文發(fā)言稿．
（1）過(guò)去對(duì)成年的向往：
（2）現(xiàn)在的感受和認(rèn)識(shí)；
（3）將來(lái)的目標(biāo)及措施．
注意：
（1）詞數(shù)100左右
（2）文中不能出現(xiàn)本人相關(guān)信息．
（3）可以適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，使行文連貫．
（4）發(fā)言稿的開(kāi)頭與結(jié)束語(yǔ)已為你寫(xiě)好，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)．
Good morning，everyone!
The topic of my speech today is"Thoughts on becoming a grown-up"．
As a child，I always hoped that I could grow up as soon as possible so that I could have whatever I wanted and do whatever I liked．【高分句型】（過(guò)去對(duì)成年的向往）Now I'm a grown-up，but I find things do not go as I expected．（現(xiàn)在的感受）Although I can enjoy more freedom，at the same time I realize that being a grown-up not only means this，but also more responsibilities．【高分句型】（現(xiàn)在的認(rèn)識(shí)）I hope to do more for my parents and society in the future to make my life more meaningful．（將來(lái)的目標(biāo)）To reach the goal，I must first try my best to pass the college entrance examination and enter a good university．（要采取的措施）
Thank you for your listening．

Answer 1

分析 本作文為應(yīng)用文，根據(jù)所給要點(diǎn)內(nèi)容寫(xiě)一篇在校成人儀式上的發(fā)言稿，屬于提綱作文．時(shí)態(tài)為一般過(guò)去時(shí)和一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)．人稱(chēng)以第一人稱(chēng)為主．
【亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明】本文結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊，層次分明，而且使用了多種表達(dá)：重要短語(yǔ)：grow up （成長(zhǎng)），not only …，but also（不但…而且），reach the goal （實(shí)現(xiàn)目標(biāo)…），try one's best…（努力做），enter a good university（上好大學(xué)）．
As a child，I always hoped that I could grow up as soon as possible so that I could have whatever I wanted and do whatever I liked．【高分句型】
Although I can enjoy more freedom，at the same time I realize that being a grown-up not only means this，but also more responsibilities．【高分句型】

解答 Good morning，everyone!
    The topic of my speech today is"Thoughts on becoming a grown-up．"
    As a child，I always hoped that I could grow up as soon as possible so that I could have whatever I wanted and do whatever I liked．【高分句型】（過(guò)去對(duì)成年的向往）Now I'm a grown-up，but I find things do not go as I expected．（現(xiàn)在的感受）Although I can enjoy more freedom，at the same time I realize that being a grown-up not only means this，but also more responsibilities．【高分句型】（現(xiàn)在的認(rèn)識(shí)）I hope to do more for my parents and society in the future to make my life more meaningful．（將來(lái)的目標(biāo)）To reach the goal，I must first try my best to pass the college entrance examination and enter a good university．（要采取的措施）
    Thank you for your listening．

點(diǎn)評(píng) 英語(yǔ)寫(xiě)作是一項(xiàng)主觀性較強(qiáng)的測(cè)試題．它不僅考查學(xué)生的寫(xiě)作基礎(chǔ)而且還考查學(xué)生在寫(xiě)作過(guò)程中綜合運(yùn)用語(yǔ)言的能力．在撰寫(xiě)時(shí)要注意主謂語(yǔ)一致，時(shí)態(tài)呼應(yīng)，用詞貼切等．要提高英語(yǔ)寫(xiě)作水平，需要兩方面的訓(xùn)練：一是語(yǔ)言基礎(chǔ)方面的訓(xùn)練，要有扎實(shí)的造句、翻譯等基本功，即用詞法、句法等知識(shí)造出正確無(wú)誤的句子；二是寫(xiě)作知識(shí)和能力 方面的訓(xùn)練以掌握寫(xiě)作方面的基本方法和技巧．