Question

7．某英文報(bào)刊開辟專欄，討論高中生的周末安排．請你結(jié)合你校學(xué)生實(shí)際，按以
下提示，用英文為該專欄寫一篇稿件．

普遍現(xiàn)象	1．全天看電視、上網(wǎng)聊天、玩游戲…； 2．無暇與家人溝通交流； 3．邊上網(wǎng)邊吃零食，不吃正餐．
你的觀點(diǎn)	1．在家比在校更疲勞； 2．失去與父母交流的機(jī)會； 3．…
你的建議	…

注意：
1．詞數(shù)120左右．開頭已為你寫好，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)．
2．根據(jù)所給提示，可適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，以使行文連貫．
3．文中不得透漏個(gè)人姓名和學(xué)校名稱．
At present，when senior high school students get weekends off，many of my classmates spend all day．

Answer 1

分析 提綱作文應(yīng)該按所要求的內(nèi)容來寫，根據(jù)所列的內(nèi)容盡量以簡明扼要的語言來表達(dá)．這篇作文要求較靈活，比如自己好的學(xué)習(xí)習(xí)慣應(yīng)是能夠提高學(xué)習(xí)效果的，不好的學(xué)習(xí)習(xí)慣會阻礙學(xué)習(xí)的．寫作時(shí)要注意適當(dāng)?shù)厥褂藐P(guān)聯(lián)詞承前啟后，用詞要得體，符合語言環(huán)境．
文中使用了非常好的短語和句子為文章增色不少  還運(yùn)用了定語從句which requires one to plan carefully．等．并注意了句子的銜接如：first of all，F(xiàn)or besides，thirdlyl等．
亮點(diǎn)句型一：As we all know，wattching TV，playing games and chatting on the Internet all day are bad for us．我們都知道，整天看電視，玩游戲和在網(wǎng)上聊天對我們是有害的．這是一個(gè)由關(guān)系代詞as引導(dǎo)的非限制性定語從句，as可以置于句首，翻譯成"正如大家所了解的"as指代整個(gè)句子的內(nèi)容．
 亮點(diǎn)句型二：Besides，they probably lose the chance of sharing their life with their parents，which makes them not understand each other well．此外，他們可能失去了與父母分享生活的機(jī)會，這讓他們彼此不太了解．which makes them not understand each other well是一個(gè)非限制性定語從句，關(guān)系代詞which指代整個(gè)主句的內(nèi)容．

解答 At present，when senior high school students get weekends off，many of my classmates spend all day waching TV，chatting and playing computer games on the Internet．So they are too busy to communicate with their parents．What's more，they have enough time to eat meals but some junk food and snacks．
 As we all know，watching TV，playing games and chatting on the Internet all day are bad for us．（亮點(diǎn)句型一）First of all，some of my classmates may be even more tired at home than  at school．Besides，they probably lose the chance of sharing their life with their parents，which makes them not understand each other well．（亮點(diǎn)句型二）Thirdly，it is certain that eating the junk food and snacks is harmful to health．．【闡明現(xiàn)象】
In my opinion，we should spend less time in front of the TV or the computer．To make ourselves relaxed，we can go out to take some exercise and do some sports．We‘d better spend as much time as we can with friends and family members who love us．And we need enough sleep and have a healthy diet to keep fit．【表明觀點(diǎn)】

點(diǎn)評 本文屬于提綱作文，動筆前，一定要認(rèn)真分析要點(diǎn)，理解要點(diǎn)要表達(dá)的含義，不能遺漏要點(diǎn)，跑題偏題．平時(shí)除了加強(qiáng)詞匯積累，寫作聯(lián)系以外，還可以適當(dāng)記憶一些類似的范文，這樣在考試中可以起到事半功倍的效果．