Question

圖片中一位老人在小河邊為滿臉淚痕的孫子洗臉。請(qǐng)你對(duì)圖片內(nèi)容用英語(yǔ)進(jìn)行描述并談自己對(duì)留守兒童這一現(xiàn)象的感受。字?jǐn)?shù)為100個(gè)詞左右。

Answer 1

One possible version:
I was shocked by the picture at first sight. In the picture, by a small river, a little boy had tears on his lovely face and an old man, maybe his grandfather, was wiping his tears. From the clothes they are wearing we can see that they are poor. The boy was sad. Is it because his parents are working in a place far away from home and the boy is missing them day and night?
I think so. At present, many parents leave their children at home in order to support their family. These parents have no choice. I hope something can be done to help these parents get back home as soon as possible.

試題分析：本篇作文主要是看圖作文，高中英語(yǔ)的看圖作文寫作有4個(gè)要求，3個(gè)步驟。這4個(gè)要求是：1、要點(diǎn)齊全；2、結(jié)構(gòu)連貫；3、用詞準(zhǔn)確多樣；4、書寫整潔標(biāo)準(zhǔn)。3個(gè)步驟是：1、畫出圖片中的要點(diǎn)；2、將要點(diǎn)用英語(yǔ)表達(dá)出來(lái)，表達(dá)的時(shí)候要注意用多樣的詞匯來(lái)表達(dá)類似的意思，以及注意長(zhǎng)短句相結(jié)合，善用連接詞；3、最后寫在卷子上，注意書寫工整。
圖片清晰，學(xué)生很容易把握寫作要求和寫作目的�？忌�在寫作之前必修認(rèn)真審題，首先要注意文章的時(shí)態(tài)，要求是對(duì)學(xué)生日常生活中存在的留守兒童現(xiàn)象給予關(guān)注，所以要用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)。要求讓你留守兒童的感受，因此本文必須用第一人稱。再有就是不能根據(jù)圖片描述圖片中的老人與兒童而已，應(yīng)該注意聯(lián)想到孩子的家庭狀況，什么原因使他們獨(dú)自在家----那是因?yàn)楦改鸽x開(kāi)家到外面打工掙錢以至于孩子日日思念，但為了謀生其父母不得不這樣做，最后要注意用一些連接詞把句子銜接起來(lái)，以提高作文的檔次。
【亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明】文中使用了非常好的短語(yǔ)和句子為文章增色不少，比如had tears on his lovely face，wiping his tears，I think so, far away from home，missing them，day and night，help these parents get back home ，at first sight還運(yùn)用了表語(yǔ)從句Is it because his parents are working in a place far away from home; 句子many parents leave their children at home in order to support their family.中引用in order to 引導(dǎo)目的狀語(yǔ)；賓語(yǔ)從句I hope something can be done to help these parents get back home as soon as possible.
等等。并注意了句子的銜接如： In order to，I think so. because等等。