Question

【題目】書面表達(dá)

假如你是李華，你的朋友Peter來信談到他渴望和別人交流，渴望得到別人或給予別人幫助，但他感到交友困難。請你給他寫一封信，提出你的建議。要點如下：

1、和別人交流是一個好的想法，每個人都有和別人交流的愿望；

2、你應(yīng)該主動找別人溝通；

3、當(dāng)別人遇到困難時，你要提供力所能及的幫助；

4、友誼需要長期的培養(yǎng)。

注意1.詞數(shù)120左右。

2. 信的開頭和結(jié)尾已給出，不計入總字?jǐn)?shù)。

Dear Peter,

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Yours ever,

Li Hua

Answer 1

【答案】

Dear Peter,

It is a good idea to communicate and make friends with others. Nobody is unwilling to have friends in the world . To win real friendship , my opinions are as follows .

Firstly, you’d better offer to say hello to others. With a smile on your face, you are more attractive. The student sitting next to you is most likely to become your friend because there are more chances for you to communicate with him or her.

Secondly, try to lend a hand to people when they are in need of help .

Finally, you should know it will take a long time to build friendship . you should also be aware that not all friendships work out. If someone doesn’t want to be friends, move on to someone else. It is good to have friends who have their own ideas and opinions. Don’t expect everyone to be just like you.

I hope it will be of some help to you.

Best wishes.

Yours ever,

Li Hua

【解析】

試題分析：這是一篇提綱類書面表達(dá)，文章的要點也基本上都給出來了，而且很具體，考生要把要點解釋清楚，不能有遺漏。除了表達(dá)這些要點以外，還要給出自己的建議，這就要求考生自己拓展發(fā)揮，在寫作的過程中，要注意使用高級詞匯和高級句型，如強調(diào)句，倒裝句等，讓文章更上檔次。同時在列舉措施的時候要使用合適的連接詞如：First，second， Besides, What’s more等，讓文章看起來很有條理，也很流暢。本篇文章在寫作時不要啰嗦，力求簡潔。

【亮點說明】所給范文語言簡潔，運用了一些詞組和句子：say hello to打招呼，next to，communicate with交流，lend a hand to伸出援手，in need of，take a long time to，be aware，work out，move on，It is a good idea to communicate and make friends with others以及It is good to have friends who have their own ideas and opinions運用了形式主語，because there are more chances for you to communicate with him or her.because引導(dǎo)的從句以及there are句型，還有文章還使用了Firstly, Secondly, Finally,這樣的關(guān)聯(lián)詞，使文章更加連貫。