Question

請(qǐng)仔細(xì)觀察下面的圖片, 按要求用英語(yǔ)寫(xiě)一篇100-120字的小短文.

要求: 1. 簡(jiǎn)述圖片中的故事。
2. 圖片中的故事傳達(dá)了什么道理？
3. 談?wù)勀愕目捶?
詞匯：煙斗tobacco pipe
One day Jack decided to_______________________________________________________
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Answer 1

One possible version：
One day Jack decided to kick the bad habit of smoking. So he threw his favorite tobacco pipe out of the window. Just at that time he seemed to regret what he did and hurriedly ran downstairs and out of the house, just in time to catch the pipe, smiling. Obviously he is still a heavy smoker. The humorous story try to convey the message that once determined, we should never stop to achieve our goal.
If we want to succeed in what we have promised, I think, it involves more about commitment and perseverance. Promises made in our life, like losing weight, giving up bad habits, or study hard, all require these two good qualities, which guarantee the successful fulfillment. Those who change their mind easily will find themselves often in a disappointing situation .

試題分析：本文是一篇圖畫(huà)作文。圖畫(huà)作文的寫(xiě)作模式一般是先描述圖片內(nèi)容，然后就此發(fā)表自己的觀點(diǎn)和看法。本篇書(shū)面表達(dá)給出的圖片內(nèi)容是一個(gè)人看著手中的煙斗，然后把它從窗口仍了出去，后來(lái)又匆忙下樓去找，恰好煙斗被一個(gè)老太太給接到了。通過(guò)審圖可以聯(lián)想到的內(nèi)容是：這個(gè)人想戒煙，但是意志不堅(jiān)定，人們?cè)诔晒Φ穆飞弦残枰�有毅力，否則會(huì)一無(wú)所成。寫(xiě)作時(shí)要注意，描述圖畫(huà)部分時(shí)應(yīng)該使用一般過(guò)去時(shí)，而發(fā)表議論部分則要使用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)。而且在寫(xiě)作過(guò)程中要適當(dāng)使用連接詞和過(guò)渡句，以使文章內(nèi)容銜接自然，語(yǔ)言連貫通順，層次結(jié)構(gòu)清晰。此外，還要盡量使用高級(jí)詞匯和豐富的句式以提高文章檔次。
【亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明】本篇范文分為兩個(gè)自然段，在第一段中作者通過(guò)想象用簡(jiǎn)潔流暢的語(yǔ)言描述了圖片的內(nèi)容，比如Just at that time he seemed to regret what he did and hurriedly ran downstairs and out of the house, just in time to catch the pipe, smiling.，這些動(dòng)作的描述非常形象生動(dòng)，給人們一種恍若發(fā)生在眼前的感覺(jué)。在第二段中作者由此聯(lián)想到自己生活中承諾的兌現(xiàn)，比如像減肥，改掉壞習(xí)慣，努力學(xué)習(xí)等等，這些目標(biāo)和承諾的實(shí)現(xiàn)都需要毅力和決心。這些聯(lián)想都非常貼近圖畫(huà)表達(dá)的中心，能夠起到很好的論證作用。此外，在本段中作者還使用了狀語(yǔ)從句If we want to succeed in what we have promised，定語(yǔ)從句which guarantee the successful fulfillment.等有效地豐富了文章的句式結(jié)構(gòu)，增加了文章的亮點(diǎn)。