Question

2014年4月23日是第十九個(gè)“世界讀書日”，假定你和你的同學(xué)們?nèi)ナ袌D書館做了一天的志愿者。請(qǐng)你將出現(xiàn)在某些讀者身上的不良現(xiàn)象寫信反映給某英文報(bào)紙，呼吁大家愛護(hù)書籍，崇尚知識(shí)。要點(diǎn)如下：

1、看完書后隨意擺放； 2、聊天、打電話；

3、吃東西，亂扔垃圾； 4、亂涂亂畫，撕毀書頁。

注意：

1、詞數(shù)120左右；

2、可適當(dāng)添加細(xì)節(jié)，以使行文連貫；

Dear editor,

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Yours respectfully,

Li Hua

 

Answer 1

On World Reading Day, we went to the local library to serve as volunteers. I’d like to tell you something about the bad behaviors of some readers.

First, some readers don’t put the books where they were after reading. Also other people talk loudly or even make phone calls in the library, which greatly disturbs other readers. There are also people who eat and drink while reading, leaving rubbish on the table though there are dustbins nearby. What’s worse, notes are found in some books, making it hard for others to read. Some pages are gone, probably torn away by readers who find them useful.

I hope all the people coming to the library behave themselves while enjoying reading, creating a better reading environment for all the book lovers.

【解析】

試題分析：本次作文是個(gè)提綱類作文。寫作要點(diǎn)具體明確，描寫場景為學(xué)生所熟識(shí)，但要把這封呼吁信寫好，一要定下基本時(shí)態(tài)：一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)。二是不能忘了“呼吁”，此外需注意寫作的條理性、連貫性，用詞的準(zhǔn)確性。

亮點(diǎn)說明：該篇范文要點(diǎn)全面，詳略得當(dāng)，用語準(zhǔn)確而地道彰顯了作者駕馭英語的能力�！癋irst, Also, What’s worse, ”的使用使得文章邏輯清晰、層次感強(qiáng)。從句使用熟練，例如：狀語從句“ some readers don’t put the books where they were after reading.”，非限制性定語從句“Also other people talk loudly or even make phone calls in the library, which greatly disturbs other readers.”。此外，非謂語“ leaving rubbish on the table though there are dustbins nearby. ”“coming to the library ”“ creating a better reading environment for all the book lovers”等的準(zhǔn)確使用，增添了句式的多變性，體現(xiàn)了作者的語言能力，也使得文章錦上添花。