Question

假設(shè)你是李華，最近你的美國筆友杰里（Jerry）來信說他的一個(gè)室友經(jīng)常聽音樂到深夜，導(dǎo)致他無法入睡。他很苦惱不知該如何解決這個(gè)問題。請你給他寫一封回信，提出你的建議。

注意：詞數(shù)120左右；

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Answer 1

Dear Jerry,

Thank you for your trust in me. I understand you are feeling upset now. I’d like to offer you some advice.

Firstly, I suggest you have a heart-to-heart talk with your roommate who stays up late at night. You should let him know that you are seriously affected by his music. Secondly, you should tell him the importance of getting enough sleep since a good rest can make both of you energetic in the day time. If you’re too shy to talk with him, you can tell him about your feelings by writing him a letter. I believe he will understand you and give up the bad habit.

I hope you’ll find these ideas useful.

【解析】這是一篇寫信的書面表達(dá)，根據(jù)信中的困擾對(duì)Jerry表示安慰和理解，并給出相應(yīng)的合理建議。所以考生在寫作的時(shí)候要圍繞信中的問題來提出合理化的建議。題目沒有任何提示，所以此文的得分之高低在于考生提出建議的合理與精辟以及其語法結(jié)構(gòu)的兩點(diǎn)是否突出。無論是寫信還是寫電子郵件，都要注意其格式的規(guī)范性。

亮點(diǎn)說明：

本文采用了經(jīng)典的三段論式的寫法，條例清晰。開篇對(duì)Jerry的信任表示感謝，并引出建議，最后又對(duì)Jerry報(bào)以祝福，符合寫信的格式。第二段中用firstly,secondly兩個(gè)副詞作為連接詞使得文章連貫。句式的多樣性也使得本文增添了幾分色彩，例如I suggest you have a heart-to-heart talk with your roommate who stays up late at night賓語從句與定語從句構(gòu)成了一個(gè)復(fù)合句，you are seriously affected by his music.與you can tell him about your feelings by writing him a letter.被動(dòng)句與主動(dòng)句的交替，if條件句的使用。詞性詞義的靈活應(yīng)用亦是可圈可點(diǎn)，例如用importance替換了常見的important，用since代替了常用的because。

考點(diǎn)：書信表達(dá)