Question

你校的外教Thomas想了解剛剛結(jié)束的英語口語培訓班效果，以便制訂下一步的培訓計劃。假如你是李明，是該培訓班學員，想再參加寫作培訓，請按照所給提示用英語給Thomas寫一封電子郵件。

1．說明收獲 2．表達謝意 3．提出建議或要求

注意：

1．詞數(shù)：120~150：

2．可以適當增加細節(jié)，以使行文連貫；

3．郵件的開頭和結(jié)尾已為你寫好，不計入總詞數(shù)。

Dear Thomas，

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Yours sincerely，

Li Ming

 

Answer 1

Dear Thomas,

I’m so thankful to you for your kindness and help in the oral English training course. My spoken English has greatly improved owing to the effective training program, during which I made many new friends.

I used to be shy and un-talkative. When staying with my classmates, I tried to communicate with them in English, but I often made mistakes. Whenever I met with native speakers, I had a strong willing to practise English, but I wasn’t brave enough to open my mouth，which worried me for a long time. Luckily enough, your training course smoothed away all the difficulties. I have benefited from it.

Now, I’m glad to learn you are to organize more training courses, and I hope I can get your advice on how to improve my writing. In short, I’m looking forward to more new things in our future courses.

 

Yours sincerely,

Li Ming

【解析】考察半開放性作文

【寫作指導】

本文是一封書信，屬于應用文格式。要求以李明的口吻給外教Thomas寫信，告知本次培訓班的收獲，并提出建議和要求。所以要使用第一人稱，在描述過去這一次培訓時，使用一般過去時。在提出建議或者要求時可以使用一般將來時。

要點：1.說明收獲�？谡Z得到提高，并交到新朋友；2.表示感謝，希望對方能夠再次開設(shè)這樣的培訓班；3.提出建議或者要求：建議對方增加寫作方面的培訓。

完成本文時要充分發(fā)揮自己的想象力，靈活運用英語知識，采用不同的表達方式將各要點完整地表述出來，注意主次分明，詳略得當。語言力求準確、簡潔。根據(jù)情景的發(fā)展，按順序安排好材料。同時應選用合適的連接詞或過渡詞，使文章具有一定的連貫性�？忌�必須認真查驗是否有漏寫情況，有無拼寫錯誤及標點誤用等。

【一句多譯】

當我和同學一起的時候，我努力用英語和他們交流，但是我總是犯錯誤

①When staying with my classmates, I tried to communicate with them in English, but I often made mistakes.

②Staying with my classmates, I tried to communicate with them in English, however, I often made mistakes.