Question

【題目】假如你是李華,你們班最近就校園安全問題組織了一個主題班會,請你用英語寫一篇發(fā)言稿,

談一談你對這個主題的看法。短文應(yīng)包括下面的內(nèi)容:

1.加強(qiáng)學(xué)生安全意識的重要性;

2.在校內(nèi)外活動中應(yīng)注意哪些安全并舉例。

3.談?wù)勀阕约旱目捶ā?/span>

注意:1.可適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié),以使行文連貫; 2.詞數(shù)120左右; 3.文章開頭已給出,不計入總詞數(shù)。

My dear classmates,

Recently our class has discussed about how to make our campus a safe place to stay on.

Answer 1

【答案】

My dear classmates,

Recently our class has discussed about how to make our campus a safe place to stay on. I consider this as indeed a good practice, which will make us aware that safety should always come first in our daily life, whether when we stay at school or outside it. When we are doing sports, we should attach importance to the safety and avoid being hurt. Furthermore, when we get into trouble with our classmates, we should remain calm and avoid any form of fighting, which may only bring suffering and pain to us mentally and physically.

As far as I’m concerned, I feel all the students and teachers should work hard and create a safe environment for us.

Thanks.

【解析】

試題分析：本文是一片發(fā)言稿，介紹班會的情況。大部分的要點(diǎn)都已經(jīng)給出，考生要根據(jù)要求做適當(dāng)?shù)臄U(kuò)展，寫作時注意以下幾點(diǎn)：1、仔細(xì)閱讀有關(guān)提示，弄清試題提供的所有信息，明確有哪些要點(diǎn)。2、提綱是文章的總體框架，要在提綱的范圍內(nèi)進(jìn)行分析、構(gòu)思和想象。3、根據(jù)要表達(dá)的內(nèi)容確定句子的時態(tài)、語態(tài)。4.注意使用高級詞匯和句式，以增加文章的亮點(diǎn)。

【亮點(diǎn)說明】本文結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊，層次分明，而且使用了多種句式和結(jié)構(gòu)。運(yùn)用furthermore之類詞，讓語句結(jié)構(gòu)富有邏輯。此外，文章還使用了大量短語consider as, come first, attach importance to, as far as I’m concerned,等。