Question

書面表達(dá)
假設(shè)你是李華強(qiáng)。時(shí)下,你校不少學(xué)生帶手機(jī)上學(xué)。為此,你班組織了一次班會(huì)，討論中學(xué)生上學(xué)是否有必要帶手機(jī)。請(qǐng)你給英語(yǔ)筆友Tom寫封信，根據(jù)下表提供的信息，客觀地介紹討論的情況。可結(jié)合你校實(shí)際進(jìn)行適當(dāng)發(fā)揮，并發(fā)表自己的看法。

一些同學(xué)認(rèn)為	一些同學(xué)認(rèn)為	你的觀點(diǎn)
方便；時(shí)尚。	中學(xué)生自控能力差；玩手機(jī)浪費(fèi)時(shí)間。	（請(qǐng)你實(shí)話實(shí)說(shuō)）

注意：
正確使用英文書信的基本格式。
詞數(shù)：120左右。

Answer 1

【參考范文】
Dear Tom,
I’m so glad to hear from you.
Recently we’ve had a class meeting to discuss whether it is necessary for middle school students to carry mobile phones to school.
Some of the students think that it is more convenient for them to keep in touch with their parents and friends if they have a mobile phone. And what’s more, it’s a fashion.
However, others think that middle school students are not old enough to control themselves. It is a waste of time for students to play games and send messages to each other by mobile phone. And it’s easy to cause the students to vie(攀比) with each other. If necessary, they can make phone calls by using public phones on the campus.
In my opinion, as middle school students we should put all of our heart into our studies though following the fashion is understandable.
What do you think of it?
With best wishes,                               
Yours truly,
Li Huaqiang

解析這篇作文是書信，首先要注意書信的格式，即：開頭稱謂,問(wèn)候，正文，祝福，署名，缺一不可。作文的重點(diǎn)是正文部分，又分提出話題-學(xué)生是否有必要帶手機(jī)，介紹不同的觀點(diǎn)，自己的觀點(diǎn)。這樣才是完整的結(jié)構(gòu)框架。
在表述觀點(diǎn)時(shí)，要注意句型的合理運(yùn)用，比如it句型的運(yùn)用：it is more convenient for them to keep in touch with…./ It is a waste of time for students to play games and send messages to each other by mobile phone. /And it’s easy to cause the students to vie(攀比) with each other.非謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞的用法：middle school students are not old enough to control themselves. /they can make phone calls by using public phones on the campus. /following the fashion is understandable.省略句的用法，如：If necessary 另外，為了使文章連貫，行文流暢一些關(guān)聯(lián)詞必不可少，如：what’s more ，However ，In my opinion也使得文章的邏輯關(guān)系更加清晰。綜上所述，這篇作文是一篇很好的范文。