Question

【題目】假設(shè)你是紅星中學(xué)高三學(xué)生李華。 請(qǐng)根據(jù)以下四幅圖的先后順序, 寫一篇英文周記, 記錄你在上周末爸爸出差期間，為家里拼搭花架的經(jīng)歷。

注意：詞數(shù)不少于60。

提示詞：花架flower shelf

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Answer 1

【答案】Last weekend, I fixed up a wooden flower shelf for my family when Dad was away on business, which was really a rewarding experience.

On Sunday afternoon, I was reading my favorite book when the doorbell rang. It was a package delivered to Mum. After thanking the courier, I helped Mum carry it in. Mum suggested leaving the work to Dad. But I decided to do it myself. Immediately, I opened the package. Inside, there were some wooden boards, iron parts, and an instruction manual. Having read the manual carefully, I got down to work. With a screwdriver, I fixed the frame first, and then put the boards on it piece by piece. After two hours of hard work, a lovely flower shelf appeared in front of my eyes. Mum and I were both pleased and we started putting potted plants onto it.

When Dad came back, hearing it was I who had assembled the flower shelf, he, with a broad smile, gave me a thumbs-up. At that moment, my feeling of content and pride was beyond description.

Though I am a busy student, I still can do something for my family.

【解析】這是一篇看圖寫作，一共四幅圖。一般說來，看圖寫話中的漢語提示往往給定了有關(guān)的時(shí)間、地點(diǎn)、人物等相關(guān)的信息，有的還規(guī)定了文章所采用的體裁，如使用書信、留言、日記等。因此，在審題時(shí)我們一定要注意所給的漢語提示。

第一步，認(rèn)真閱讀漢語提示和圖片，把握中心。

本文根據(jù)漢語提示可知，是寫一篇英文周記，記錄你在上周末爸爸出差期間，為家里拼搭花架的經(jīng)歷。這是文章要表達(dá)的中心。

第二步，初步構(gòu)思，考慮用詞、短語、句型和時(shí)態(tài)。

講述上周末自己做的事，確定時(shí)態(tài)是過去時(shí)、第一人稱。之后構(gòu)思一個(gè)基本的框架，并考慮使用恰當(dāng)?shù)脑~語、短語和句型，以充分地表達(dá)文章的內(nèi)容。

第三步，連詞成句，然后再連句成文。

運(yùn)用適當(dāng)?shù)膯卧~或短語正確表達(dá)各圖的意思。然后再將各圖的單個(gè)句子串連起來。串連時(shí)，要注意使用適當(dāng)?shù)倪B接詞語或過渡性語句，不至于讓讀者覺得文章中出現(xiàn)跳躍現(xiàn)象，更使上下文更為緊湊、自然。

第四部，反復(fù)審核，修改錯(cuò)誤。

一篇文章寫好后，應(yīng)進(jìn)行檢查，看短文中是否有錯(cuò)，如拼寫、用詞、時(shí)態(tài)、語態(tài)及表達(dá)方面的錯(cuò)誤。

第五部，宜詳則詳，該略則略。

對(duì)于一些細(xì)節(jié)方面的內(nèi)容，如果是文章必不可少的，在寫作過程中是不可將其忽略的。如果是可有可無的細(xì)節(jié)，則可視具體情況進(jìn)行增刪。據(jù)此，我們?cè)谧x圖時(shí)一定要注意閱讀各圖中的一些細(xì)節(jié)內(nèi)容，看其是否影響文章的內(nèi)容。

【亮點(diǎn)說明】

本文是一篇看圖作文。文章內(nèi)容符合圖畫所表達(dá)的含義，語句精煉，文中使用高級(jí)句子。I fixed up a wooden flower shelf for my family when Dad was away on business, which was really a rewarding experience.句中運(yùn)用when引導(dǎo)的時(shí)間狀語從句和which引導(dǎo)的非限制性定語從句；I was reading my favorite book when the doorbell rang.固定句式be doing...when...；Having read the manual carefully, I got down to work.現(xiàn)在分詞完成式做時(shí)間狀語；Though I am a busy student, I still can do something for my family.此處是Though引導(dǎo)的讓步狀語從句。