Question

高考臨近，許多家長用金錢，旅游等承諾鼓勵孩子努力學習，考上一所好大學。假定你是高三學生李華，請根據(jù)所提供的有關信息，給某英文報社寫封短信。

內容要點：

1、許多家長用金錢，旅游等承諾鼓勵孩子努力學習，考上一所好大學；

2、可能會導致學生只關注物質獎勵，而減少學習樂趣；

3、一旦獲得想要的獎勵就失去了學習動力；

4、你的建議。

注意：

1、不要逐詞逐句地翻譯。

2、為使語句連貫，可以適當增加細節(jié)。

3、詞數(shù)100左右，信的開頭和結尾已給出，不計入總數(shù)。

Dear Editor,

With the college entrance examination approaching, …

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Yours truly,

Li Hua

 

Answer 1

Dear Editor,

With the college entrance examination approaching, many parents try to encourage their children to study hard and be admitted into a famous university. They promise that they will be rewarded with things such as money, traveling and so on once they achieve the goal.

However, I don’t think this is a proper way. Firstly, it may lead to the fact that children’s attention will focus on such things instead of the pleasure of studying; Secondly, they may stop working hard as soon as they get what they want.

I think a wise way is to make us aware of the importance of going to a good university. Besides, we should have much knowledge for our future. What’s your opinion?

Yours truly

Li Hua

【解析】

試題分析：

題目要求根據(jù)所給信息給英文報社寫一封信。信的要點包括：家長通過許下承諾來鼓勵孩子好好學習考入理想大學；可能導致學生減少學習興趣；容易失去學習動力；自己的建議。 注意不要逐詞逐句翻譯，可適當拓展，注意語句的連貫性；詞數(shù)在100詞左右，開頭和結尾不計入總詞數(shù)；注意書信的格式，不能出現(xiàn)標點和拼寫錯誤。

亮點說明：

范文注意使用and so on, However, Firstly, Secondly, Besides等連接上下文，使作文條理清晰、語意連貫；

范文使用了with復合結構With the college entrance examination approaching；賓語從句that they will be rewarded with things，a wise way is to make us aware of the importance of going to a good university；同位語從句that children’s attention will focus on such things...；條件狀語從句once they achieve the goal；時間狀語從句as soon as they get what they want等；語法知識的使用使作文的檔次得到了提高；

范文使用了一些固定短語：try to，study hard，be admitted into，such as，lead to，instead of等，豐富了作文的內容。

考點：書信類作文