Question

One day, a poor boy was so hungry that he decided to beg for a meal at the next house. However, he lost his nerve when a lovely young woman opened the door. Instead of a meal he asked for a drink of water. She thought he looked hungry so she brought him a large glass of milk. He drank it slowly, and then asked, “How much do I own you?” “You don't owe me anything,” she replied, “Mother has taught me never to accept pay for a kindness.” “Then I thank you from the bottom of my heart.” With these words, Howard Kelly left that house.

Year later the woman became badly ill and was finally sent to the hospital in a big city. Dr. Howard Kelly, now famous, was called in. When he heard the name of the town she came from, a strange light filled his eyes. Dressed in his doctor's clothes, Dr. Kelly went into her room and recognized her at once. From that day on, he gave special attention to her, and decided to do his best to save her life.

After a long struggle, the battle was won. Dr. Kelly asked the business office to pass the final bill to him. He looked at it and then wrote something on the side. The bill was sent to her room. She was afraid to open it because she was sure that it would take the rest of her life to pay it off. Finally she looked, and the note on the side of the bill caught her attention: “Paid in full with a glass of milk. Dr. Howard Kelly.”

【寫作內(nèi)容】

1.以約30詞概括上文的主要內(nèi)容。

2.以約120詞對“幫助他人”的話題進行討論，內(nèi)容包括：

1) 你從這個故事領(lǐng)悟到什么道理？

2) 舉一個例子說明當你遇到困難時，你的朋友是怎么做的？

3) 你是如何報答你朋友的幫助的？

【寫作要求】

1.作文中可以使用親身經(jīng)歷或虛構(gòu)的故事，也可以參照閱讀材料的內(nèi)容，但不得直接引用原文中的句子。

2.作文中不能出現(xiàn)真實姓名和學校名稱。

【評分標準】 概括準確，語言規(guī)范，內(nèi)容合適，語篇連貫。

Answer 1

When a poor boy was hungry, a young woman gave hem a glass of milk. Years later, as a famous doctor, he saved the woman’s life and paid the final bill for her in return for her earlier help. (39 words)

Greatly inspired by the story, I learn that we should always be ready to help those in need and that once helped by others, we should be grateful to others and try to repay them or pass on the kindness.

The story reminds me of one of my own experiences. One Friday night, school was over and I was about to go home when it started to rain heavily. Having left my umbrella at home, I could do nothing but wait helplessly in the classroom, feeling increasingly worried with every minute passing by. Just at this moment, Henry offered to lend me his umbrella, which I think he might need for the weekend. But he insisted that he could share one with others since he stayed in the school dormitory and that I should go home at once before it was too late. Little act as it might seem, Henry’s kindness and willingness to help greatly impressed me.

It happened that several days before the mid-term exam, Henry fell seriously ill and had to stay in hospital for days, as a result of which, he missed some lessons and was very worried. I went to the hospital to accompany him every day, helping him make up for his lessons. Eventually, he got good marks in the exam, which delighted both of us.

【解析】

試題分析：該題要求將一篇較長的短文用30字概寫出來，同時要完成一篇與該實例相關(guān)的文章，需要考生對文章主旨的把握和主要信息提煉整合能力，難度較大。本文記敘了一個幫助與感恩的故事，一位小男孩在困窘饑餓的時候受到了一位年輕女士大方無私的幫助，他從中感受到了力量與希望，長大后成為了一名著名的醫(yī)生，在那位年輕婦女此時已是重病纏身，后來他知道了這位女士就是當年的恩人后，努力幫助救治她并幫她付清了債務，后來她也痊愈了的故事。

【亮點分析】1、文章脈絡結(jié)構(gòu)清晰，先用30 字概括了信息的內(nèi)容，然后寫自己的收獲與感悟，再舉自己在雨中受助的例子，后來再寫在生病期間跟他補課，回報他人，整體框架嚴密。2、靈活運用了多種句型，現(xiàn)在分詞作狀語、非謂語等形式，如：Greatly inspired by the story, I……；The story reminds me of one of my own experiences,；Having left my umbrella at home, I , feeling； I went to the hospital to accompany him every day, helping him make up for his lessons.使文章豐富有內(nèi)涵，流利連貫。3、使用了固定短語、構(gòu)造了好句，賓語從句、定語從句等，如：,be grateful to，was about to go home,he insisted that he could share，It happened that, as a result of which，從上述例子中不難看出作者遣詞造句的能力，文章鮮活有力度。4、恰當使用連詞，是文章邏輯清楚，如：Just at this moment, Eventually等，層次分明，文章流暢。

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