Question

9．假如你是李明，暑假期間你去某城市旅游住在一家酒店．你對酒店的服務(wù)不太滿意，因此給酒店的外國經(jīng)理Robert寫了一封投訴信．
（1）飯菜價(jià)格比同類酒店高很多；
（2）承諾24小時(shí)供應(yīng)熱水，但經(jīng)常在晚上10點(diǎn)后就停止供水了；
（3）客房里的電視有問題，打了幾次電話都沒人來修理；
（4）客房不整潔，服務(wù)員打掃不及時(shí)．
注意：1．詞數(shù)100左右． 2．內(nèi)容可適當(dāng)發(fā)揮，注意行文連貫．
Dear Robert，
I'm one of your customers．I'm writing to tell you that there are a few aspects that are not quite satisfactory in your hotel．（高分句型一）
To begin with，the prices of the food in your hotel are much higher than those of other hotels．Therefore，most of the ordinary people can't afford it．Secondly，you have promised to provide hot water 24 hours a day，but it often happens that there is no hot water after 10 p．m．（高分句型二）What's more，the picture on the TV set in my room was not clear，but nobody came to repair it although I phoned several times．（高分句型三）Finally，the room was not clean enough，and the service people didn't clean it in time．
I hope you can take necessary measures to improve the present situation．
Yours，
Li Ming．

Answer 1

分析 本篇書面表達(dá)屬于提綱類作文，根據(jù)提示信息暑假期間你去某城市旅游住在一家酒店．你對酒店的服務(wù)不太滿意，因此給酒店的外國經(jīng)理Robert寫了一封投訴信，寫作時(shí)注意以下幾點(diǎn)：1、仔細(xì)閱讀有關(guān)提示，弄清試題提供的所有信息，明確幾個(gè)要點(diǎn)：（1）飯菜價(jià)格比同類酒店高很多；（2）承諾24小時(shí)供應(yīng)熱水，但經(jīng)常在晚上10點(diǎn)后就停止供水了；（3）客房里的電視有問題，打了幾次電話都沒人來修理；（4）客房不整潔，服務(wù)員打掃不及時(shí)．2、提綱是文章的總體框架，要在提綱的范圍內(nèi)進(jìn)行分析、構(gòu)思和想象．要依據(jù)提示情景或詞語，按照一定邏輯關(guān)系來寫．本文寫作時(shí)可以按照要點(diǎn)所給的順序?qū)懀?、根據(jù)要表達(dá)的內(nèi)容確定句子的時(shí)態(tài)、語態(tài)；就本文而言應(yīng)該用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)態(tài)．4．注意使用高級詞匯和句式，以增加文章的亮點(diǎn)．
【亮點(diǎn)說明】本文結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊，層次分明，而且使用了多種表達(dá)：To begin with首先；Therefore因此；Secondly其次；What's more而且；Finally最后；in time及時(shí)；take necessary measures to采取必要措施；
I'm writing to tell you that there are a few aspects that are not quite satisfactor y in your hotel．（高分句型一）
Secondly，you have promised to provide hot water 24 hours a day，but it often happens that there is no hot water after 10 p．m．（高分句型二）
What's more，the picture on the TV set in my room was not clear，but nobody came to repair it although I phoned several times．（高分句型三）

解答 Dear Robert，
     I'm one of your customers．I'm writing to tell you that there are a few aspects that are not quite satisfactory in your hotel．（高分句型一）
     To begin with，the prices of the food in your hotel are much higher than those of other hotels．Therefore，most of the ordinary people can't afford it．Secondly，you have promised to provide hot water 24 hours a day，but it often happens that there is no hot water after 10 p．m．（高分句型二）What's more，the picture on the TV set in my room was not clear，but nobody came to repair it although I phoned several times．（高分句型三）Finally，the room was not clean enough，and the service people didn't clean it in time．
     I hope you can take necessary measures to improve the present situation．
                                                                                                                                                                                                   Yours，
Li Ming．

點(diǎn)評 英語寫作是一項(xiàng)主觀性較強(qiáng)的測試題．它不僅考查學(xué)生的寫作基礎(chǔ)而且還考查學(xué)生在寫作過程中綜合運(yùn)用語言的能力．在撰寫時(shí)要注意主謂語一致，時(shí)態(tài)呼應(yīng)，用詞貼切等．要提高英語寫作水平，需要兩方面的訓(xùn)練：一是語言基礎(chǔ)方面的訓(xùn)練，要有扎實(shí)的造句、翻譯等基本功，即用詞法、句法等知識造出正確無誤的句子；二是寫作知識和能力 方面的訓(xùn)練以掌握寫作方面的基本方法和技巧．