Question

【寫(xiě)作內(nèi)容】
Health Magazine做了一項(xiàng)調(diào)查，了解到現(xiàn)在人們的健康狀況在下滑，主要原因如下：
1．工作忙碌，壓力過(guò)大，缺少鍛煉；
2．生活沒(méi)有規(guī)律，熬夜，休息不夠；
3．不少人有抽煙、喝酒的習(xí)慣，
4. 對(duì)空氣、水和食品的污染加��；
5．建議：適時(shí)放松，多運(yùn)動(dòng)，培養(yǎng)良好的生活習(xí)慣，戒煙，戒酒，保護(hù)環(huán)境。
【寫(xiě)作要求】只能使用5個(gè)句子表達(dá)全部?jī)?nèi)容。

Answer 1

According to the survey made by Health Magazine, compared with the past, people are in poorer health. One of the main reasons is that people are living a busy life without taking enough exercise and suffer lots of stress. Besides, many people  lead an irregular life, stay up late at night or do not have enough rest. Worse still, a number of people have got into the habit of smoking and drinking alcohol, and the pollution to the air, water and food has got more serious. To change this situation, we should relax at a proper time, do more sports, form a good living habit, keep away from cigarette and alcohol and protect the environment.

試題分析：考生首先要仔細(xì)審題，包括以下幾個(gè)方面：（1）層次結(jié)構(gòu)，（2）句子的時(shí)態(tài)（3）內(nèi)容要點(diǎn)。尤其是內(nèi)容要點(diǎn)要把握準(zhǔn)確到位，這是半開(kāi)放性作文，要點(diǎn)需要考生拿捏準(zhǔn)確以及正確，這加大了寫(xiě)作難度。再者考生要注意盡可能使句子的表達(dá)形式多樣化，適當(dāng)?shù)氖褂靡恍└呒?jí)句式和高級(jí)詞匯，以提高書(shū)面表達(dá)的檔次和可讀性。因?yàn)橹荒苁褂?個(gè)句子表達(dá)全部的內(nèi)容。又要包括所有的要點(diǎn)，考生要多使用復(fù)雜句，一句話中多包含些信息，如范文里面的句子：a number of people have got into the habit of smoking and drinking alcohol, and the pollution to the air, water and food has got more serious.就包含了幾個(gè)要點(diǎn)內(nèi)容。
點(diǎn)評(píng)：作文要層次清晰，要點(diǎn)全面，表達(dá)流暢，切合作文要求，句子結(jié)構(gòu)準(zhǔn)確，信息內(nèi)容完整，篇章結(jié)構(gòu)連貫。文中使用一些極佳的詞語(yǔ)和句子為文章增色，使用高級(jí)詞匯及句型。