Question

5．假設你叫李華，現(xiàn)是武漢大學的一名新生．請你根據(jù)以下提示，給你中學的英語老師李老師寫一封感謝信，表達對他的感謝．詞數(shù)100左右．
提示：
1．對英語李老師表達感謝．
2．回顧在校時考試的壓力、堆積如山的作業(yè)和父母的高期望讓你很沮喪，多虧老師的鼓勵和耐心指導，讓你成績提高，終于實現(xiàn)夢想．
3．希望老師的學生都能進入理想大學．

Answer 1

分析 本篇書面表達屬于提綱類作文，根據(jù)提示信息假設你叫李華，現(xiàn)是武漢大學的一名新生．請你根據(jù)以下提示，給你中學的英語老師李老師寫一封感謝信，表達對他的感謝，寫作時注意以下幾點：1、仔細閱讀有關提示，弄清試題提供的所有信息，要點包括：對英語李老師表達感謝．回顧在校時考試的壓力、堆積如山的作業(yè)和父母的高期望讓你很沮喪，多虧老師的鼓勵和耐心指導，讓你成績提高，終于實現(xiàn)夢想．希望老師的學生都能進入理想大學2、提綱是文章的總體框架，要在提綱的范圍內進行分析、構思和想象．要依據(jù)提示情景或詞語，按照一定邏輯關系來寫．本文寫作時可以按照要點所給的順序寫．3、根據(jù)要表達的內容確定句子的時態(tài)、語態(tài)．4．注意使用高級詞匯和句式，以增加文章的亮點．
【亮點說明】文章結構合理，語言流暢地道．全文沒有中國式英語思維，體現(xiàn)出考生很好的駕馭英語的能力．文章層層推進，有理有據(jù)，情感真摯．語法方面：定語從句…，which I have been dreaming about；虛擬語氣If it had not been for your help，I might not have been admitted by my dream school…這些語法知識運用嫻熟，顯示了較強的語法功底，作文句式變得多樣，表達更有條理；短語和搭配方面：范文使用了make progress、be admitted by…短語和搭配，使作文的內容變得充實．I am now a freshman of Wuhan University，which I have been dreaming about．（高分句型一）
If it had not been for your help，I might not have been admitted by my dream school．（高分句型二）
At that time，the pressure of examinations，too much homework and the high expectations from my parents made me depressed．（高分句型三）

解答 Dear Mr Li，
       I'm very excited to write this letter to express my gratitude to you．I am now a freshman of Wuhan University，which I have been dreaming about．（高分句型一）If it had not been for your help，I might not have been admitted by my dream school．（高分句型二）
       Mr Li，I still remember the days when you taught me English．At that time，the pressure of examinations，too much homework and the high expectations from my parents made me depressed．（高分句型三）Thanks for your encouragement and guidance，I made progress and achieved my dream finally．
       I wish more and more of your students could go to their ideal colleges．Thank you for your help and support again and wish you all the best!
                                                                                                                                                                                                       Yours，
                                                                                                                                                                                                      Li Hua

點評 英語寫作是一項主觀性較強的測試題．它不僅考查學生的寫作基礎而且還考查學生在寫作過程中綜合運用語言的能力．在撰寫時要注意主謂語一致，時態(tài)呼應，用詞貼切等．要提高英語寫作水平，需要兩方面的訓練：一是語言基礎方面的訓練，要有扎實的造句、翻譯等基本功，即用詞法、句法等知識造出正確無誤的句子；二是寫作知識和能力 方面的訓練以掌握寫作方面的基本方法和技巧．