Question

假定你是李華，亞洲冬季運(yùn)動(dòng)會(huì)將在你居住的地方舉辦，現(xiàn)在正在招募志愿者，你希望成為其中一員。請(qǐng)按要求用英文給組委會(huì)寫(xiě)一封申請(qǐng)信，內(nèi)容應(yīng)包括：
個(gè)人情況：年齡、性別、學(xué)歷
個(gè)人條件：英語(yǔ)好、愛(ài)好體育、善于交往、樂(lè)于助人、熟悉本地情況。
承諾：提供最佳服務(wù)
注意：
詞數(shù)100左右，開(kāi)頭語(yǔ)已為你寫(xiě)好;可適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，以使行文連貫。
生詞：申請(qǐng) apply（v.）,application (n.);志愿者 volunteer
Dear Sir /Madam,
My name is LiHua. I would like to work as a volunteer for the Winter Asian Games.
                                                                                    
                                                                                    
                                                                                    
                                                                                    
                                                                                    

Answer 1

One possible version:
My name is LiHua .I would like to work as a volunteer for the Winter Asian Games.
I am a girl of 18.As a college student, I have a keen interest in sports and I have always been looking forward to the games to be held here.
With the great fluency in English and the passion for sports, I suppose I am qualified to be a volunteer for the Games. Besides, I have a good communicative competence and I am considered to be an outgoing, reliable and helpful person at college. What’s more,, I am familiar with the local conditions. I promise I will offer the best service to whoever participates in the games.
Now I formally apply for the job and I sincerely hope I can be accepted.
Yours faithfully,
LiHua

解析試題分析：本篇書(shū)面表達(dá)是要求寫(xiě)一封申請(qǐng)信，類似于自我介紹，學(xué)生應(yīng)該很容易把握寫(xiě)作要求�？忌�在寫(xiě)作之前必須認(rèn)真審題，首先要注意文章的時(shí)態(tài)，申請(qǐng)信要求介紹自己情況，所以要用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)，當(dāng)然也必須用第一人稱。寫(xiě)作時(shí)不要根據(jù)材料逐字翻譯，應(yīng)該注意細(xì)節(jié)的補(bǔ)充以及文章結(jié)構(gòu)上的銜接，以提高作文的檔次。
【亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明】文章格式正確，要點(diǎn)全面。不僅As a college student;  with the great fluency in English and passion for sports 等短語(yǔ)使句子更為簡(jiǎn)潔生動(dòng)，而且keen，qualified，participates in 等高級(jí)詞匯的使用也使文章錦上添花，此外Besides ，What’s more 等插入語(yǔ)也讓上下文銜接更為緊湊，讀起來(lái)朗朗上口。
考點(diǎn)：提綱作文。