Question

9．隨著經(jīng)濟(jì)的發(fā)展，越來(lái)越多的家庭擁有小汽車，因此，放學(xué)時(shí)，家長(zhǎng)接學(xué)生的車輛總會(huì)導(dǎo)致校門口的交通過度擁擠，學(xué)校對(duì)此非常苦惱．假如你是高三年級(jí)的學(xué)生李津，請(qǐng)給張校長(zhǎng)寫一封信，分析一下該現(xiàn)象產(chǎn)生的原因以及潛在的危險(xiǎn)，并提出你的建議：
1．鼓勵(lì)同學(xué)們坐公交車或者選擇共享單車上學(xué)；環(huán)保便捷；
2．提醒家長(zhǎng)有序停車；
3．各年級(jí)可以分時(shí)間放學(xué)．
注意：100詞左右：開頭已給出，不計(jì)入詞數(shù)．（共享單車Bicycle-sharing）
Mr．Zhang，
I'm writing to you to share my opinions about the problem of heavy traffic every day after school at our school gate．With the development of economy，more and more families begin to have cars of their own，which contributes partly to the problem．（高分句型一）
Besides，some parents always try to park their cars as close as possible to the school gate，without taking anything else into consideration．（高分句型二） In order to solve it，I firmly hold the view that some effective measures must be taken．First，I think it necessary to call on all the students to go back home by bus or by bike．Second，if they have to be picked up by their parents by car，they'd better remind their parents to park their cars in proper places．（高分句型三） Finally，it might be helpful to make students of different grades leave school at different times．
I hope my suggestions will be useful to help solve the problem．
Best wishes!
Yours，
Li Jin．

Answer 1

分析 本文是書信類作文，要求給校長(zhǎng)寫一封信，分析一下校園擁堵產(chǎn)生的原因，并提出你的建議．題目沒有具體說(shuō)明要點(diǎn)內(nèi)容，考生就這兩方面展開說(shuō)就可以，在寫作的過程中，要注意使用高級(jí)詞匯和高級(jí)句型，如強(qiáng)調(diào)句，倒裝句等，讓文章更上檔次．同時(shí)在列舉措施的時(shí)候要使用合適的連接詞如：First，second，Besides，What's more等，讓文章看起來(lái)很有條理，也很流暢．本篇文章在寫作時(shí)不要啰嗦，力求簡(jiǎn)潔．
【亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明】所給范文語(yǔ)言簡(jiǎn)潔，應(yīng)用了一些較好的詞組和句子：contributes to導(dǎo)致，taking sth．into consideration．將…考慮在內(nèi)，call on sb to do號(hào)召某人做…pick up 撿起，remind sb to do提醒某人做…，With the development of economy，more and more families begin to have cars of their own，which contributes partly to the problem．這句話用了定語(yǔ)從句，In order to solve it，I firmly hold the view that some effective measures must be taken．這句話用了同位語(yǔ)從句，I think it necessary to call on all the students to go back home by bus or by bike．這句話用了it做形式賓語(yǔ)，it might be helpful to make students of different grades leave school at different times．這句話用了it做形式主語(yǔ)．還有范文還使用了Besides，F(xiàn)irst，Second，F(xiàn)inally，這樣的關(guān)聯(lián)詞，使文章更加通順．
With the development of economy，more and more families begin to have cars of their own，which contributes partly to the problem．（高分句型一）
Besides，some parents always try to park their cars as close as possible to the school gate，without taking anything else into consideration．（高分句型二）
Second，if they have to be picked up by their parents by car，they'd better remind their parents to park their cars in proper places．（高分句型三）

解答 Mr．Zhang，
        I'm writing to you to share my opinions about the problem of heavy traffic every day after school at our school gate．With the development of economy，more and more families begin to have cars of their own，which contributes partly to the problem．（高分句型一）
        Besides，some parents always try to park their cars as close as possible to the school gate，without taking anything else into consideration．（高分句型二） In order to solve it，I firmly hold the view that some effective measures must be taken．First，I think it necessary to call on all the students to go back home by bus or by bike．Second，if they have to be picked up by their parents by car，they'd better remind their parents to park their cars in proper places．（高分句型三） Finally，it might be helpful to make students of different grades leave school at different times．
       I hope my suggestions will be useful to help solve the problem．
       Best wishes!
                                                                                                                                                                                                                                     Yours，
                                                                                                                                                                                                                                      Li Jin

點(diǎn)評(píng) 英語(yǔ)寫作是一項(xiàng)主觀性較強(qiáng)的測(cè)試題．它不僅考查學(xué)生的寫作基礎(chǔ)而且還考查學(xué)生在寫作過程中綜合運(yùn)用語(yǔ)言的能力．在撰寫時(shí)要注意主謂語(yǔ)一致，時(shí)態(tài)呼應(yīng)，用詞貼切等．要提高英語(yǔ)寫作水平，需要兩方面的訓(xùn)練：一是語(yǔ)言基礎(chǔ)方面的訓(xùn)練，要有扎實(shí)的造句、翻譯等基本功，即用詞法、句法等知識(shí)造出正確無(wú)誤的句子；二是寫作知識(shí)和能力 方面的訓(xùn)練以掌握寫作方面的基本方法和技巧．