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18．假設(shè)你們班將召開(kāi)一次"friendship"為話題的班會(huì)，請(qǐng)你結(jié)合現(xiàn)實(shí)，談一下自己關(guān)于友誼的理解，以樹(shù)立正確的友誼觀念，創(chuàng)造良好班風(fēng)．參考要點(diǎn)如下：
1．友誼的重要性；
2．對(duì)友誼的錯(cuò)誤理解：一起違反學(xué)校紀(jì)律，如欺負(fù)別人，一起吸煙喝酒，包庇同學(xué)的錯(cuò)誤等；
3．正確的友誼觀念：熱愛(ài)集體，互相幫助，共同進(jìn)步．
要求：詞數(shù)120左右．
開(kāi)頭已經(jīng)給出：
Dear Classmates，I think it is very necessary for us to talk about friendship at the meeting today．

Answer 1

分析 本篇書(shū)面表達(dá)屬于提綱類作文，根據(jù)提示信息假設(shè)你們班將召開(kāi)一次"friendship"為話題的班會(huì)，請(qǐng)你結(jié)合現(xiàn)實(shí)，談一下自己關(guān)于友誼的理解，以樹(shù)立正確的友誼觀念，創(chuàng)造良好班風(fēng)，寫(xiě)作時(shí)注意以下幾點(diǎn)：1、仔細(xì)閱讀有關(guān)提示，弄清試題提供的所有信息，明確幾個(gè)要點(diǎn)：友誼的重要性；對(duì)友誼的錯(cuò)誤理解：一起違反學(xué)校紀(jì)律，如欺負(fù)別人，一起吸煙喝酒，包庇同學(xué)的錯(cuò)誤等；正確的友誼觀念：熱愛(ài)集體，互相幫助，共同進(jìn)步．2、提綱是文章的總體框架，要在提綱的范圍內(nèi)進(jìn)行分析、構(gòu)思和想象．要依據(jù)提示情景或詞語(yǔ)，按照一定邏輯關(guān)系來(lái)寫(xiě)．本文寫(xiě)作時(shí)可以按照要點(diǎn)所給的順序?qū)懀?、根據(jù)要表達(dá)的內(nèi)容確定句子的時(shí)態(tài)、語(yǔ)態(tài)；就本文而言應(yīng)該用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)態(tài)．4．注意使用高級(jí)詞匯和句式，以增加文章的亮點(diǎn)．
【亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明】本文結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊，層次分明，而且使用了多種表達(dá)：get on well相處的好；on the contrary相反的；for example例如；point out指出；in fact事實(shí)上；do harm to對(duì)…有害；in my opinion以我的觀點(diǎn)來(lái)看；be based on以…為根據(jù)；make progress取得進(jìn)步；what's worse更糟的是；
Healthy friendship may help people get on well and benefit one another．（高分句型一）
What's more，we should encourage each other，never cover up each other's mistakes，so that we may learn well and achieve great success．（高分句型二）

解答 Dear classmates，
        I think it is very necessary for us to talk about friendship at the meeting today．
        As a member of society，we need friends and friendship．Healthy friendship may help people get on well and benefit one another．（高分句型一）On the contrary，unhealthy friendship may bring about bad things．For example，some so-called friends bully others in the school； they often smoke or drink together； they never point out each other's mistakes．Such deeds are against school rules．In fact，they are doing harm to their friends．
        In my opinion，friendship should be based on the love of our class．Friends should help each other with study or in making progress．What's more，we should encourage each other，never cover up each other's mistakes，so that we may learn well and achieve great success．（高分句型二）

點(diǎn)評(píng) 英語(yǔ)寫(xiě)作是一項(xiàng)主觀性較強(qiáng)的測(cè)試題．它不僅考查學(xué)生的寫(xiě)作基礎(chǔ)而且還考查學(xué)生在寫(xiě)作過(guò)程中綜合運(yùn)用語(yǔ)言的能力．在撰寫(xiě)時(shí)要注意主謂語(yǔ)一致，時(shí)態(tài)呼應(yīng)，用詞貼切等．要提高英語(yǔ)寫(xiě)作水平，需要兩方面的訓(xùn)練：一是語(yǔ)言基礎(chǔ)方面的訓(xùn)練，要有扎實(shí)的造句、翻譯等基本功，即用詞法、句法等知識(shí)造出正確無(wú)誤的句子；二是寫(xiě)作知識(shí)和能力 方面的訓(xùn)練以掌握寫(xiě)作方面的基本方法和技巧．