Question

20．某動(dòng)物關(guān)愛協(xié)會(huì)面向?qū)W校招募"動(dòng)物代言人"，希望申請(qǐng)者選擇一種自己喜歡的動(dòng)物，并為之代言．假如你是石家莊市新華中學(xué)的學(xué)生李華，有意參與該活動(dòng)．請(qǐng)你用英語(yǔ)給活動(dòng)負(fù)責(zé)人寫一封申請(qǐng)郵件，內(nèi)容如下：1．表示有意參加；2．說明自己關(guān)愛動(dòng)物；3．打算為哪種動(dòng)物代言；4．希望申請(qǐng)成功．注意：1．詞數(shù)在100左右；2．可以適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，以使行文連貫；3．開頭語(yǔ)已經(jīng)寫好．4．參考詞匯：代言人spokesman
Dear sir，
  I'm Li Hua，a student from Xinhua Middle school in Shijiazhuang．_______________
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Answer 1

分析 本文是一篇提綱作文，要求按照提示信息完成所給表格的申請(qǐng)陳述部分．根據(jù)提示可知本部分需要三部分內(nèi)容，即表明自己的想法；陳述自己申請(qǐng)代言的理由；表達(dá)自己的希望．在寫作時(shí)需要用現(xiàn)在時(shí)說明自己的想法，用將來(lái)時(shí)表明自己的計(jì)劃．此外還要注意用高級(jí)句式和高級(jí)詞匯，提高文章的檔次．
【亮點(diǎn)說明】本文要點(diǎn)全面，結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊，語(yǔ)言通順流暢．在文章中作者使用了一些過渡或者總結(jié)的詞匯，比如meanwhile，therefore，in short等，使文章銜接緊湊．此外還用了in spite of，be capable of，go extinct，boost the harvest 等高級(jí)詞匯短語(yǔ)，顯示了作者豐富的詞匯量．
In this day and age，there is a growing awareness that animals are our friends and we ought to conserve them．（高分句型一）
In spite of the fact that sometimes they may kill people，nevertheless，they are capable of catching mice in the fields so as to boost the harvests．（高分句型二）
I harbor the idea that I'll preserve in protecting animals forever．（高分句型三）

解答 Dear Sir，
       I'm Li Hua，a student from Xinhua Middle school in Shijiazhuang．In this day and age，there is a growing awareness that animals are our friends and we ought to conserve them．（高分句型一）Therefore，I won't miss this chance to participate in it．
       I'm considerate，friendy and patient．Meanwhile，I adore animals and will aid them when they're needed．I'd like to speak for snakes．In spite of the fact that sometimes they may kill people，nevertheless，they are capable of catching mice in the fields so as to boost the harvests．（高分句型二）Nowadays，a vast numbler of snakes are hunt in order to assemble their fur or eat them．Several kinds of them are going extinct!
       In short，I desire to apply successfully．I harbor the idea that I'll preserve in protecting animals forever．（高分句型三）
                                                                                                                                                                                                   Yours，
                                                                                                                                                                                                  Li Hua

點(diǎn)評(píng) 英語(yǔ)寫作是一項(xiàng)主觀性較強(qiáng)的測(cè)試題．它不僅考查學(xué)生的寫作基礎(chǔ)而且還考查學(xué)生在寫作過程中綜合運(yùn)用語(yǔ)言的能力．在撰寫時(shí)要注意主謂語(yǔ)一致，時(shí)態(tài)呼應(yīng)，用詞貼切等．要提高英語(yǔ)寫作水平，需要兩方面的訓(xùn)練：一是語(yǔ)言基礎(chǔ)方面的訓(xùn)練，要有扎實(shí)的造句、翻譯等基本功，即用詞法、句法等知識(shí)造出正確無(wú)誤的句子；二是寫作知識(shí)和能力 方面的訓(xùn)練以掌握寫作方面的基本方法和技巧