Question

14．假設(shè)你是張華，你的朋友李明在騎車上學的途中遇到車禍，腿受傷并在醫(yī)院接受了手術(shù)．請你代表全班同學給他寫一封慰問信，表達以下幾點信息：
1 聽說他住院并接受了手術(shù)，表示慰問；2、你們將在周六上午去看望他；3、將會幫助他補習所缺的功課；4、愿意提供任何可能的幫助．
文章必須包含以上要點，詞數(shù)為100～120．

Answer 1

分析 本文是一篇慰問信．主要講述了張華代替全班同為為受傷住院的朋友李明寫的一封慰問信．首先注意文章的書寫格式，這是一篇信件類的文章，對格式有一定要求：開頭頂個寫稱謂，另起一行空兩格寫正文，最后一段寫祝愿，最后落款．其次就是理解文章的大意，對文章的脈絡(luò)進行概括，然后書寫．
從大題中可知，本文主要是站在李華的角度上代替全班同學為李明寫一封慰問信．其次，根據(jù)題目中給的要點，擬寫文章的段落大綱，進行書寫．本文主要分成三個部分：第一部分是同學們送上的祝福，第二部分是告知李明將會去看望他，第三部分就是表明同學們會為李明提供一切可以的幫助．文章的段落清晰，用詞簡潔大方．值得同學們借以參考．
【亮點說明】本文結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊，層次分明，而且使用了多種表達．knock down撞到；be patient有耐心的；be  ready to準備好
We were shocked when we heard that you were knocked down by a truck while cycling to school．（高分句型）
We are sorry to have learned that you have had an operation on your injured leg and that you have to stay in hospital．（高分句型）

解答 Dear Li Ming，
   How are you now？All of us are worried about you．We were shocked when we heard that you were knocked down by a truck while cycling to school．（高分句型）We are sorry to have learned that you have had an operation on your injured leg and that you have to stay in hospital．（高分句型）Let us hope that it will be for only a very short time，and that you will soon be out of hospital．Everybody here sends his best wishes to you for a quick recovery．
   We'll come to see you on Saturday morning．We have decided to help you with your lessons that you have missed．So，don't worry and be patient．If there is anything we can do for you，please let us know when we come．（高分句型）We are always ready to help you．
   Hope you will recover soon．
                                                           Yours，
                                                           Zhang Hua

點評 應(yīng)該注意適當增加細節(jié)以使行文連貫，比如適當選用表示因果、遞進、轉(zhuǎn)折關(guān)系的連接詞，使文章流暢、通順，并避免因反復(fù)使用句式相同的簡單句而造成的單調(diào)感．（1）認真審題，確定體裁． （2）構(gòu)思要點．根據(jù)題目要求，理解要表達的要點．設(shè)計好文章的層次段落，考慮所用時態(tài)、人稱等，把要點串聯(lián)起來，構(gòu)成文章框架．（3）選詞造句，避難選易．（4）認真檢查，避免錯誤．仔細閱讀全文，查找是否有錯，注意時態(tài)、單詞拼寫、字母大小寫、標點是否有誤，句式是否正確．邏輯是否一致．