Question

9．央視知名記者柴靜自費制作的關(guān)于環(huán)境污染的紀錄片《穹頂之下》引起強烈反響．假如你是李華，請用英語給21世紀英文報寫一封信，表達你的觀點．
內(nèi)容包括：
1．闡述柴靜所做的事對我們生活的影響；
2．面臨環(huán)境污染我們能做些什么．
注意：
1．詞數(shù)100左右；
2．開頭和結(jié)尾已給出，不計入總詞數(shù)．
Dear editor，
After watching the movie Under the Dome，I was deeply moved by what Chai Jing did．
         ．
Best wishes!
Yours，
Li Hua．

Answer 1

分析 本文要求考生對紀錄片《穹頂之下》做出評論，題中已經(jīng)給出了要點內(nèi)容，考生首先要選擇自己熟悉的短語或者句型，在能力范圍之內(nèi)，選擇句式時要賦予變化，因為這樣才可以更好的駕馭．同時也要選擇合適的連接詞，把各個要點組織成一個完整的整體，
 重要短語：
 be worthy of，值得；approve of 支持；For instance，例如；
高分句子：
1．I'm strongly convinced that an increasing number of Chinese have realized the great harm that pollution has done and will do what they can to improve our environment．本句為that引導的賓語從句，從句中又包含了what引導的主語從句，很見考生功底．
2．Only when we make every effort to reduce pollution can we feel ease under the dome，本句為重要句式，only位于從句句首時，主句要進行倒裝，意為只有…才…

解答 Dear editor，
After watching the movie Under the Dome，I was deeply moved by what Chai Jing did．The movie has aroused the public's environmental awareness and is worthy of admiration（敘述影響）．
Thanks to the movie，I'm strongly convinced that an increasing number of Chinese have realized the great harm that pollution has done and will do what they can to improve our environment（高分句型）．
I approve of the view that everyone is supposed to take effective measures to protect our environment from being polluted．For instance，we can choose green transport like walking and bicycling．Obviously，the government should strengthen the management of pollutant emission．Only when we make every effort to reduce pollution can we feel ease under the dome（高分句型）．We do need the immediate change（給出建議）．
Best wishes!
 
Yours，
Li Hua

點評 提綱式作文要求考生根據(jù)給出的題目和提綱，確定文章的中心思想，然后緊緊圍繞中心思想展開論述，表達提綱的主旨．它的優(yōu)點是提綱既體現(xiàn)了文章的層次，又規(guī)定了各段大體的內(nèi)容，為考生提供了一條思路，稍加思索、計劃、整理就可成文．但缺點是如果審題不當，反而容易丟分．