Question

6．你的英國朋友Simon 下個月要來你校學習半年．他來信請你對他上學期間的交通方式提出建議．現(xiàn)在，請你用英語回一封信，按以下要點答復．
1．建議騎自行車上學；
2．自行車是學生常用交通工具；
3．自行車價格便宜，停放容易，有益健康，利于環(huán)保（environment環(huán)境）．
注意：詞數(shù)不超過120，信的開頭和結(jié)束語已為你寫好，不計入總詞數(shù)．
可根據(jù)內(nèi)容要點適當增加細節(jié)，使行文連貫．
Dear Simon，
Very glad to hear from you and you are welcome to study in our school for half a year．
                                                              
Yours，
Li Ming．

Answer 1

分析 本文是一封書信應用文，向英國朋友來校學習的交通方式提出建議．要求提示較詳細，考生容易把握寫作要求和寫作目的．考生在寫作之前要認真審題，根據(jù)提示寫作主要有三段內(nèi)容，第一段已經(jīng)給出提示，開門見山表明自己的態(tài)度及建議--騎自行車上學；第二段具體描述騎自行車的好處及注意問題；第三段結(jié)束，提出自己的希望，表達自己的祝福．另外，要注意文章的時態(tài)，用一般現(xiàn)在時和將來時．人稱用第二人稱．再有就是不能根據(jù)提示內(nèi)容逐字逐句的翻譯形成漢式的英語，應該注意句子的銜接，以提高作文的檔次．
【亮點說明】文章符合書信的寫作要求，要點齊全，表達思路明確，知識點運用恰當?shù)轿�，文中使用了非常好的短語和句子為文章增色不少，比如hear from，as to，recommend，no matter how busy，protect the environment并用動名詞做主語，buying or repairing a bicycle doesn't cost a lot；parking a bicycle is easy and convenient in our school；還運用了主語從句：What you should do carefully is just to…； what I have mentioned above could be helpful…注意了句子的銜接如：Here are some reasons．Firstly，Next，Actually，In this way，Hopefully等．這些詞句用得恰當?shù)轿唬瑸槲恼略鎏砩�彩�?/p>

解答 Dear Simon，
      Very glad to hear from you and you are welcome to study in our school for half a year．As for the question about the transportation to and from school，I'd like to recommend your riding a bicycle．（高分句型一）Here are some reasons．
      Firstly，riding a bike to and from school is very common among the students，for buying or repairing a bicycle doesn't cost a lot．（高分句型二）Next，parking a bicycle is easy and convenient in our school，no matter how busy the traffic could be．（高分句型三）Actually，bicycle-riding is also a practical way to do exercise and protect the environment．What you should do carefully is just to keep an appropriate speed while riding and lock it after you're off it．In this way，you'll feel it simple and relaxing to ride a bicycle while you're here．
      Hopefully，what I've mentioned above could be helpful and wish you a fun time in our school．（高分句型四）                                                                         
                                                                                                                                                                                                                                  Yours，
                                                                                                                                                                                                                                  Li Ming．

點評 英語寫作是一項主觀性較強的測試題．它不僅考查學生的寫作基礎而且還考查學生在寫作過程中綜合運用語言的能力．在撰寫時要注意主謂語一致，時態(tài)呼應，用詞貼切等．要提高英語寫作水平，需要兩方面的訓練：一是語言基礎方面的訓練，要有扎實的造句、翻譯等基本功，即用詞法、句法等知識造出正確無誤的句子；二是寫作知識和能力 方面的訓練以掌握寫作方面的基本方法和技巧．