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12．據(jù)報(bào)道十八位復(fù)旦大學(xué)學(xué)生去黃山探險(xiǎn)遇險(xiǎn)，報(bào)警求救．相關(guān)部門派出救援隊(duì)伍前往營救，歷盡艱辛救出了學(xué)生，但有一位民警不幸犧牲．請就"是否應(yīng)該鼓勵大學(xué)生去探險(xiǎn)"這個話題談?wù)勀愕目捶ǎ?br />探險(xiǎn)：explore or go to unknown places
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Answer 1

分析 寫好這類作文要注意幾個步驟：1． 認(rèn)真審題，找準(zhǔn)提示語中的關(guān)鍵詞或句，確定中心思想．2． 依據(jù)關(guān)鍵句，草擬提綱，梳理文章的脈絡(luò)3． 準(zhǔn)確定位人稱、時態(tài)．注意使用高級詞匯和高級句型使文章顯得更有檔次．4．最后還要認(rèn)真查驗(yàn)是否有漏寫情況，有無拼寫錯誤及標(biāo)點(diǎn)誤用等
高分句型一：
Some people take it for granted that college students should explore the unknown world by exploreing．
一些人們想當(dāng)然地認(rèn)為大學(xué)生該研究探索未知的世界．
高分句型二：
They can hardly make any new discovery because the world has been explored mostly and is still being explored by scientists．
他們幾乎不可能有任何新發(fā)現(xiàn)，因?yàn)槭澜缫呀?jīng)被仍在探索的科學(xué)家探索的差不多了．

解答 When asked about a theme，different people will offer different opinions．Exploreing is no exception．Some people take it for granted that college students should explore the unknown world by exploreing（高分句型一）．However，others hold that it is unnecessary and insignificant to be engaged in any adventure in modern times．
As far as I am concerned，I'm in favor of the second view．The reasons are as follows．
Firstly，there is an element of truth that to transform the world college students should know it first，but it doesn't follow that people need to go adventuring．It is unnecessary for modern people to sail around the world in a small boat single-handed，or pass through the desert of the jungle on foot alone，etc．The reason is that there are hardly any places in the world that have never been discovered．A case in point is that eighteen Fudan University students to explore Mount Huang distress，alarm for help，lead to a placeman died in the Mount Huang in the end．Although theie adventure caused a stir in society，I think it was worthless and insignificant because the wen adventuring only out of curiosity and didn't make any valuable discovery as Columbia did．Therefore，the first view cannot bear much analysis．
In conclusion，in modern times college students need not to adventuring．They can hardly make any new discovery because the world has been explored mostly and is still being explored by scientists（高分句型二）．

點(diǎn)評 這是一篇開放式作文，寫作時不要僅僅對要點(diǎn)進(jìn)行生硬的翻譯，而是要添加些內(nèi)容，使文章看起來更充實(shí)，要組成一篇通順連貫的短文．需要注意緊扣文章主題，給出的要點(diǎn)都需要包括，缺一不可．盡量使用自己熟悉的單詞句式，同時也要注意使用高級詞匯和高級句型使文章顯得更有檔次．