Question

13．My brother and I were alone at home because my parents had gone for a meeting and they had left me in charge．I was doing my homework while my younger brother was watching TV．Suddenly the doorbell rang．My younger brother rushed to the door thinking that our parents had come home，he unlocked the door and opened it．
Outside stood a tall man wearing a black raincoat and black rubber boots．He said he was a salesman and asked politely if out mother or father was at home．
Without thinking，my brother said："No．"He asked if we would like to buy some comic books which he was selling．I quickly explained that we were not supposed to buy anything without our parent's permission．
Then，as I was about to close the door，he forced his way into our house．He took out a knife and forced me to tie up my brother's hands with some rope which he took out form his pocket．I tied up his hands but tied it in a special way so my brother could untie himself．The man then tied my hands up and locked both of us in the kitchen．
Soon，the went upstairs to search the bedroom for valuables．I managed to teach my brother to untie the rope on the his hands．He then untied me．I rushed to the telephone to call the police， but the line was dead．The doors were all locked from the outside and I did not have the keys to unlock them．Luckily， the robber forgot to lock the kitchen window．My brother managed to get out of the house through the window and I told him to go to the police station nearby and call for help．
注意：
1．所續(xù)寫短文的詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右．
2．應(yīng)使用5個以上短文中標(biāo)有下劃線的關(guān)鍵詞語．
3．續(xù)寫部分分為兩段，每段的開頭語已為你寫好．
4．續(xù)寫完成后，請用下劃線標(biāo)出你所使用的關(guān)鍵詞語．

Answer 1

分析 這是一個故事，所以人稱用第一人稱，時態(tài)以一般過去時態(tài)為主．內(nèi)容包括兩部分，一敘述帶著警察抓住罪犯的過程；二這件事給我的體會．
（高分句型一）There we were told that robber was a wanted criminal who the police have been trying to catch for a long time．
首先句子使用了被動語態(tài)，we were told…；另外，在criminal后who引導(dǎo)的是一個定語從句，修飾criminal；
（高分句型二）By the time my parents had come home，they lectured us that，as children，we should see who it was outside out house before opening the door．
該句的時態(tài)使用較好，by the time 后接過去時，意思是到…為止；they lectured us that后接賓語從句，在從句使用who it was…陳述語氣；

解答 After a while，my brother brought the police to our house．The policelet us hid somewhere and they went upstairs to catch the robber who was still there searching for valuable things．A few minutes later，there was a big noise and then the rubber was brought downstairs．We were very happy．But we had to go the police station to make a report．（高分句型一）There we were told that robber was a wanted criminal who the police have been trying to catch for a long time．The police thanked us for our excellent work．（敘述帶著警察抓住罪犯的過程）
    （高分句型二）By the time my parents had come home，they lectured us that，as children，we should see who it was outside out house before opening the door．And we shouldn't open the door to strangers，especially those who looked highly suspicious．I remembered and I thought I learnt an important lesson on safety and responsibility．（這件事給我的體會）

點評 這是一篇續(xù)寫故事的作文．續(xù)寫故事一定要和原文在內(nèi)容和時態(tài)上連貫一致，所以熟讀原文很重要．其他方面和一般的寫作時一樣的要求，詞語運用正確是最主要的要求，也是閱卷老師給分的重點．