Question

16．假定你是李華，你的美國朋友Tom一周前給你發(fā)電子郵件，詢問你暑假里的打算，但你因準(zhǔn)備期末考試未能及時回復(fù)．請你根據(jù)下面的要求給他回一封郵件，要點如下：
1．未及時回信的原因；
2．你假期的打算（如做兼職、旅游、做志愿者等）．
3．詢問他的打算
注意：1．詞數(shù)100左右；2．可適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，以使行文連貫；3．開頭已為你寫好．
Dear Tom，
     I'm sorry that I haven't replied to your last e-mail in time because                    
                                                                                  
                                                                               
                                                                    Yours，
                                                                    Li Hua．

Answer 1

分析 本文是篇郵件應(yīng)用文，內(nèi)容提示較簡潔，只是框架，但學(xué)生容易把握寫作要求和寫作目的．考生在寫作之前必修認(rèn)真審題，首先要注意文章的時態(tài)，用一般現(xiàn)在時和將來時．人稱用第一和第二人稱．根據(jù)寫作要求文章分三段來寫．第一段首先對不能及時回復(fù)郵件表示歉意并表明原因，之后提出自己的打算．第二段重點描述自己的具體計劃和想法．第三段總結(jié)全文．再有就是不能根據(jù)材料逐字逐句的翻譯應(yīng)該注意句子的銜接，以提高作文的檔次．
【亮點說明】文章要點齊全，表達(dá)思路明確，知識點運用恰當(dāng)?shù)轿唬�文中使用了非常好的短語和句子為文章增色不少，比如in time，prefer to go travelling，cultural background，broaden one's horizon，enrich one's knowledge等．還運用了現(xiàn)在完成進(jìn)行時since I have been preparing for the final exam recently；to do做目的狀語not only to enjoy the delicious food，but to learn about people from a different cultural background；定語從句where I can appreciate the creations of nature and relax myself；which should not be missed to broaden my horizon as well as enriching my knowledge．等等．并注意了句子的銜接如：first，second，finally，all in all等．
 I'm glad to receive your email，and I am sorry I couldn't reply in time since I have been preparing for the final exam recently．（高分句型一）
 First，I would spend a couple of days in Japan not only to enjoy the delicious food，but to learn about people from a different cultural background．（高分句型二）
Second，walking through a well-known national park is another must on my list，where I can appreciate the creations of nature and relax myself．（高分句型三）

解答 Dear Tom，
       I'm glad to receive your email，and I am sorry I couldn't reply in time since I have been preparing for the final exam recently．（高分句型一）In your email，you asked me about my plan of the summer holidays．If it comes to a choice，I prefer to go travelling．
       First，I would spend a couple of days in Japan not only to enjoy the delicious food，but to learn about people from a different cultural background．（高分句型二）Second，walking through a well-known national park is another must on my list，where I can appreciate the creations of nature and relax myself．（高分句型三）Finally，I would visit some museums which should not be missed to broaden my horizon as well as enriching my knowledge．
        All in all，travelling is the best choice to recharge ourselves and get ready for the new challenges．Let's just pack our suitcases and start our trip!
       Best wishes．
                                                                                                                                                                                                 Yours，
                                                                                                                                                                                                  Li Hua

點評 英語寫作是一項主觀性較強(qiáng)的測試題．它不僅考查學(xué)生的寫作基礎(chǔ)而且還考查學(xué)生在寫作過程中綜合運用語言的能力．在撰寫時要注意主謂語一致，時態(tài)呼應(yīng)，用詞貼切等．要提高英語寫作水平，需要兩方面的訓(xùn)練：一是語言基礎(chǔ)方面的訓(xùn)練，要有扎實的造句、翻譯等基本功，即用詞法、句法等知識造出正確無誤的句子；二是寫作知識和能力 方面的訓(xùn)練以掌握寫作方面的基本方法和技巧．