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11．請你以一則公益廣告--Don't let the keyboard separate you and your loved ones為題寫一篇發(fā)言稿，談談網(wǎng)絡給我們帶來的好處，并呼吁人們放下手中的鼠標，與家人多多溝通，享受與家人在一起的美好時光．
參考詞匯：網(wǎng)民-netizen
注意：1．詞數(shù)：100左右；
          2．題目與開頭已給出，不計入總詞數(shù)；
          3．可以適當增加細節(jié)，以使行文連貫；
          4．短文中不能出現(xiàn)與本人相關的信息．
Don't let the keyboard separate you and your loved onesHello everyone！
Today the number of the netizens in our country has increased rapidly，yet many of them do not pay enough attention to the family．There's no doubt that we benefit much from the Internet．For example，it's convenient for us to get the information we need and communicate with our friends and relatives．Meanwhile，it can help us learn what is happening both at home and abroad．However，no matter how attractive the Internet is，we shouldn't be separated from our loved ones．Therefore，just for a moment，we should stop surfing the Internet and spend time with our families，enjoying the time when we are together．So just remember this：don't let the keyboard separate you and your loved ones．
Please take action!That's all．Thank you!．

Answer 1

分析 這是一篇發(fā)言稿．根據(jù)題目要求可知用第一人稱和一般現(xiàn)在時態(tài)．內容包括：一網(wǎng)民沉迷于網(wǎng)絡而忽視家人的現(xiàn)狀；二網(wǎng)絡給我們帶來的好處和導致的問題；三并呼吁人們放下手中的鼠標，與家人多多溝通，享受與家人在一起的美好時光；四再次呼吁人們立刻行動．高分句型：1．There's no doubt that we benefit much from the Internet．這個句子用了固定句式There's no doubt that表示"某事是毫無疑問的"；benefit  from是固定短語，表示"從某事里獲益"．毫無疑問我們從網(wǎng)絡中獲得很多好處．
2．However，no matter how attractive the Internet is，we shouldn't be separated from our loved ones．句子里no matter how引導讓步狀語從句，表示"無論多么"； separate from表示"和…分開"．但是，無論網(wǎng)絡多么具有吸引力，我們都不能和我們所愛的人有隔閡．

解答 One possible version：
                                                                                   Don't let the keyboard separate you and your loved ones
     Hello，everyone!Today the number of the netizens in our country has increased rapidly，yet many of them do not pay enough attention to the family．（網(wǎng)民沉迷于網(wǎng)絡而忽視家人的現(xiàn)狀）There's no doubt that we benefit much from the Internet．【高分句型一】For example，it's convenient for us to get the information we need and communicate with our friends and relatives．Meanwhile，it can help us learn what is happening both at home and abroad．However，no matter how attractive the Internet is，we shouldn't be separated from our loved ones．【高分句型二】（網(wǎng)絡給我們帶來的好處和導致的問題）Therefore，just for a moment，we should stop surfing the Internet and spend time with our families，enjoying the time when we are together．So just remember this：don't let the keyboard separate you and your loved ones．（并呼吁人們放下手中的鼠標，與家人多多溝通，享受與家人在一起的美好時光）
    Please take action!That's all．Thank you!（再次呼吁人們立刻行動）

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