Question

假如你叫王芳，是校報(bào)小記者。請(qǐng)你為校報(bào)寫一篇英語(yǔ)短文，介紹最近在我國(guó)很多城市發(fā)生的霧霾(haze)天氣。請(qǐng)參考以下要點(diǎn)：

1. 危害：阻礙交通，危害健康；

2. 原因：空氣污染；

3. 如何自我防護(hù)：霧霾天氣早晚少開(kāi)窗；

多吃水果補(bǔ)充維生素；

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注意：1. 詞數(shù)不少于80；

2. 開(kāi)頭已給出，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)。

Recently haze pollution has happened in many cities of China.

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Answer 1

Recently haze pollution has happened in many cities of China. It’s one of the most dangerous weather conditions. Many accidents have occurred due to low visibility caused by haze. What’s worse, it also affects our health. If breathing in haze, people may feel uncomfortable and get ill.

The reason for haze is air pollution. It results from waste gases released from cars, factories or construction sites.

In view of the above, we need to protect ourselves from haze pollution. First of all, in case of haze pollution, we shouldn’t open the windows or take exercise before the sun rises and after sunset. Besides, we’d better wear masks when we go outside. What’s more, we should eat more fruit, from which we can get enough vitamins to build up the resistance to diseases.

【解析】

試題分析：題目假設(shè)了你的身份，即校報(bào)小記者王芳，需要為校報(bào)寫一篇英語(yǔ)短文，介紹最近在我國(guó)很多城市發(fā)生的霧霾(haze)天氣。同時(shí)參考以下三個(gè)要點(diǎn)作文：危害（阻礙交通，危害健康）、 原因（空氣污染）、自我防護(hù)措施（霧霾天氣早晚少開(kāi)窗、多吃水果補(bǔ)充維生素等）。不要出現(xiàn)標(biāo)點(diǎn)和拼寫錯(cuò)誤，盡量保持卷面整潔，字體美觀，注意行文的連貫性。

亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明：

范文中對(duì)于“原因”這一詞的表達(dá)用了多種形式的表達(dá)，“ Many accidents have occurred due to low visibility caused by haze”， “it also affects our health. ”，“The reason for haze is air pollution”，“ It results from waste gases ” ，多種形式表達(dá)同一種意思，避免重復(fù)，可以使文章變化多樣，避免單調(diào)乏味；

范文中使用了較多的語(yǔ)法知識(shí)，動(dòng)詞過(guò)去分詞短語(yǔ)做定語(yǔ) low visibility caused by haze，省略句If breathing in haze，祈使句we shouldn’t open the windows or take exercise before the sun rises and after sunset，時(shí)間狀語(yǔ)從句when we go outside，非限定性定語(yǔ)從句we should eat more fruit, from which we can get enough vitamins to build up the resistance to diseases， 固定句型結(jié)構(gòu)sth has occured 、sb had better do sth 等。動(dòng)詞過(guò)去分詞短語(yǔ)做定語(yǔ)、省略句、祈使句、時(shí)間狀語(yǔ)從句、非限定性定語(yǔ)從句、 固定句型結(jié)構(gòu)等語(yǔ)法的使用提升了文章的檔次，同時(shí)也顯示較高的語(yǔ)法知識(shí)點(diǎn)使用能力；

范文中注意使用了what’s worse，also，in view of the above,，first of all，besides，what’s more,等做連詞，增加了文章的連貫性，使文章上下聯(lián)系緊密；

范文中使用了一些固定短語(yǔ): protect sb from, in case of , take exercise ，before the sun rises a，after sunset ；build up等，豐富了文章的內(nèi)容，使文章更加充實(shí)完整。

考點(diǎn):材料類作文