Question

假如你是李華，你的筆友Mike 從媒體上得知前段時(shí)間全國多地包括寧波等地出現(xiàn)霧霾，非常擔(dān)心，寫E-mail詢問有關(guān)情況，請(qǐng)你回復(fù)�；貜�(fù)應(yīng)包括以下要點(diǎn)：1/實(shí)況描述 2.影響和成因 3.生活啟示

注意：1.詞數(shù)：100-120詞。 E-mail的開頭與結(jié)尾已給出，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)。

2.生詞：霧霾 haze

Dear Mike,

Thank you very much for your concern.

Yours,

Li Hua

Answer 1

Dear Mike,

Thank you very much for your concern. Recently many places in China including Ningbo were blanketed with thick yellow haze. Everything around disappeared from our sight. Some highways were closed. Traffic jams were commonly seen in the streets. Many people, especially children and seniors, even found it difficult to breathe. As a result, local hospitals were crowded with people who had problems with their noses and lungs. Part of the cause was the dry weather, but the severely damaged environment contributed a lot to this nightmare.

To make a significant change, we really have to do more to protect our environment. To live a better life, we have to push on with the economy, but it would be meaningless if we had to achieve it at the cost of our breathing air.

Yours,

Li Hua

【解析】這是一篇電子郵件寫作。主要是向麥克介紹霧霾的相關(guān)情況及相應(yīng)的生活啟示，考生在介紹霧霾時(shí)要盡量結(jié)合自己所知道的情況，對(duì)于相關(guān)不知道的情況不要涉及。

本文第二句Recently many places in China including Ningbo were blanketed with thick yellow haze.把including Ningbo當(dāng)做插入語，使得句子十分簡練；本文三四五句Everything around disappeared from our sight. Some highways were closed. Traffic jams were commonly seen in the streets.，三個(gè)較短的動(dòng)作性句子并列，雖然沒有用連接詞 ，但讀來朗朗上口，很有節(jié)奏感； 本文第七句local hospitals were crowded with people who had problems with their noses and lungs使用了who領(lǐng)導(dǎo)的賓語從句；第二段To make a significant change, we really have to do more to protect our environment. To live a better life, we have to push on with the economy，兩個(gè)to+動(dòng)詞原形的句子相并列，表示為了….增加了句勢；結(jié)尾but it would be meaningless if we had to achieve it at the cost of our breathing air.又使用了if領(lǐng)導(dǎo)的條件狀語從句。本文短語使用也十分好，使用了be blanketed with掩蓋…，As a result結(jié)果，be crowded with擠滿了，contribute to有助于…等很多短語，在詞語運(yùn)用上也很形象，比如第一段最后一句damaged environment contributed a lot to this nightmare.用nightmare來形容這場霧霾。十分恰當(dāng)形象。本文從句雖然運(yùn)用不多，但是詞語運(yùn)用很恰當(dāng)，使用了并列性的動(dòng)作性句子更增添文章的節(jié)奏感�？偨Y(jié)：寫作時(shí)從句的運(yùn)用需注意，并不是從句越多越好，有時(shí)用幾個(gè)并列句，更能增添文章的氣勢。

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